This issue picks up at the exact moment the last issue leaves off (apart from the flashback on page one).
Narration in this issue is in the form of James's journal entries, which should be indicated on-panel by a distinctive (neat and precise) hand-written script. These captions will be marked in the script as "James's Journal", to distinguish them from third-person narrative captions.
Note that in the dialogue, Jerome will use British spelling while the others will use American spelling.
The attic of a suburban house. Filled with a jumble of boxes and old, forgotten what-nots. The hatch in the floor is open and light spills up through it. Half in the hatchway is JAMES: late teens, dark haired, t-shirt showing off his muscles.
CAPTION (James's journal):
James is now fully in the attic. A bare bulb throws more illumination. He's crouched over a large, solid-looking chest, fumbling with the padlock. The chest has "PRIVATE" stencilled on it.
CAPTION (James's journal):
The chest is open, but we don't see in. Instead, we see the wonder on James's face.
CAPTION (James's journal):
James is starting to unpack the chest. First out is a box of computer disks, marked "FILES: 1993" and "CLASSIFIED", hand-written in a thick marker pen.
CAPTION (James's journal):
Next out is a thick, leather-bound book—the type that has a little lock and key to keep it closed. The cover reads, simply, "JOURNAL".
CAPTION (James's journal):
Finally, James brings out the costume and SHIELD. These are the same items that we saw him wearing in the last panel of issue 1. We should now be piecing together something of what is going on...
CAPTION (James's journal):
Single panel. Issue title and credits go at the bottom of this page.
A reprise of the scene that ended last issue. Los Angeles, night, a run-down part of town. There is a building on one side, open aqueduct on the other, and SARA trapped against a wire fence. James, wearing mask, costume, and shield, is protecting her, striking a heroic pose. And facing off against them, a K-MAN in wolfman form. (It should be on its feet, obviously having recovered from James's punch last issue, as this makes for a more menacing and dramatic panel.) Eyes glaring and teeth baring. (Hmmm, poetry.)
CAPTION (James's journal):
CAPTION:
James and Sara sizing each other up—the K-Man temporarily forgotten.
SARA:
JAMES (cutting her off):
CAPTION (James's journal):
Widen the view to include the K-Man, leaping towards them.
K-MAN:
SARA:
Our heroes dive in different directions, avoiding swinging claws.
JAMES:
SARA:
JAMES:
CAPTION (James's journal):
James swings his left arm—the one with the shield—and smashes the K-Man full in the face with the flat of the shield.
SFX:
CAPTION (James's journal):
The K-Man is completely unfazed by the blow.
JAMES:
CAPTION (James's journal):
James faces off against the K-Man when, surprising both of them, SARA leaps into the air and delivers a flying kick to the back of its head. It feels it! Yes, she's good at this fighting stuff when she has to be.
No dialogue.
While it's distracted, James delivers a strong right which makes it stagger back—note, it should now be manoeuvred somewhere near the edge of the aqueduct.
No dialogue.
Sara crouches behind the K-Man, in such a way as to set it up to trip over her if it steps back.
SARA:
And indeed James does just that. The K-Man staggers back—and as expected, falls backwards over SARA, towards the edge of the aqueduct.
No dialogue.
Sara and James watch the K-Man plummet down.
K-MAN:
SARA:
Up-shot, K-Man POV, looking back at them from down in the aqueduct.
K-MAN:
SARA:
JAMES:
Sara and James turn their attention to each other.
SARA:
SARA:
JAMES:
CAPTION (James's journal):
They begin to walk away.
JAMES:
JAMES:
CAPTION (James's journal):
Close on JAMES and SARA looking over their shoulders as they hear the K-Man behind them.
SARA:
K-MAN (off panel):
SARA:
JAMES:
James and Sara running through the streets. Possibly a long, high POV to illustrate how small and alone they are.
SARA:
CAPTION (James's journal):
Exterior establishing shot of ST MARTIN'S CHURCH. It's big, solid, old-looking. Kind of grim and foreboding in the street light. No light from within it. The surrounding street is deserted.
FROM INSIDE CHURCH:
Inside the church. It's dimly lit—streetlight coming from outside. The church is obviously disused. There are wooden benches, but none of the other church accoutrements.
FRED, JEROME, and CHI-YUN are here and all obviously ill-at-ease. Fred is smoking (as usual). (Must get away from this smoking-in-every-panel thing. It's getting a bit heavy-handed.) Fred and Jerome are facing off. Chi-Yun stands a little apart.
JEROME:
CHI-YUN (softly):
Close on Fred and Jerome, in each other's faces.
FRED:
JEROME:
More of them arguing. Widen to include Chi-Yun. Fred is looking at Chi-Yun. He's pointing to his temple and making circling motions: "loony".
FRED:
CHI-YUN:
Still in the church. Note that, despite his attitude, Fred is grinding his cigarette out.
FRED (softly):
CHI-YUN (softly):
JEROME:
CHI-YUN:
The other two look at Chi-Yun. Obviously a bit skeptical. Chi-Yun looks down at her remarkably intact abdomen.
CHI-YUN:
SFX:
SFX:
SFX:
Fred, Chi-Yun, and Jerome all look at the big wooden door.
THROUGH DOOR:
Fred is moving towards the door.
CHI-YUN:
FRED:
CHI-YUN:
Fred has obviously let Sara and James in. Sara shuts the door. This is our first view of the whole group together, so should be a pretty big panel.
FRED:
SARA:
JEROME:
CAPTION (James's journal):
Sara moves into the church, looking around. The others are busy sizing each other up.
JEROME:
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
Still generally standing around in the church.
JAMES:
SARA:
JEROME:
Jerome is moving towards a big, solid-looking bench near the main door. He motions to James.
JEROME:
JAMES:
Jerome and James are, with some effort, lifting the PEW.
JEROME:
JAMES:
Close up of Jerome and James sharing a "bonding" moment. Both grinning like idiots.
JAMES:
JEROME:
Fred watches James and Jerome block the door with the bench, er, pew.
FRED:
JEROME:
FRED:
Close on Sara and Chi-Yun. We should still be able to see Fred and Jerome in the background. Jerome has said something that Fred finds funny.
FRED:
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
The others coming over to join SARA and CHI-YUN
FRED (softly):
JAMES:
SARA:
They are still in the church.
SARA:
JAMES:
Close-up on Fred, frowning. Maybe the others in the background, if not then Sara's speech can come from off-panel.
SARA:
FRED:
Wide panel, very close on Fred's eyes. We're going to continue using the eyes to indicate his psychic powers working, at least till I think of a better way to do it. Anyway, there are two K-Men in human form "reflecting" in his pupils.
FRED:
Still on Fred's eyes. And there are now four K-Men.
FRED:
The whole group staring at Fred.
SARA:
JAMES:
CHI-YUN:
SFX:
Jerome taking charge, moving towards the main door, pointing at the others.
JEROME:
SARA:
JEROME:
SFX:
Their POV looking back towards the big, high window—the one above the altar—which has shattered most spectacularly. Shards of glass are still falling through the air. Two K-Men (in wolfman form) are perched on the sill, poised to leap down into the church.
JEROME:
Our gang looking small and defenceless in the big old church, as the two K-Men drop to the ground and another appears in the window. James is the only one looking away from the window (actually looking back at the main door, which we can't see).
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
SFX:
JAMES:
Remember the big solid door with the big solid bench in front of it? It's now a big un-solid hole. Three K-Men have KA-RASHED their way in.
No dialogue.
BIG FIGHT!!!! While Chi-Yun and Fred don't do much, Sara, James and Jerome take on the first wave of K-Men. But it should be obvious they are on the defensive. Dodging and blocking and not striking back.
CAPTION (James's journal):
Close on Sara, from behind, as she sidesteps an attack. The phone in her back jeans pocket is ringing.
SARA (thought):
SFX (lettering should be a "wavy" line and should include little musical notes, as it's the musical ringtone):
Sara has her phone to her ear.
SARA (yelling):
FROM PHONE:
Sara looking at the others (who are retreating before the menacing K-Men). Jerome is pointing to a small door on the North wall.
SARA:
JEROME:
Close on Chi-Yun looking at the door.
CHI-YUN (thought):
Chi-Yun begins to run towards the door.
No dialogue.
Chi-Yun still running, and changing. Her skin should take on a grey hue, and her upper body is kind of bigger, more solid. More muscular. Like Chi-Yun on steroids. Not a hugely exaggerated change, but enough for the reader to see that something is happening.
No dialogue.
Chi-Yun hits the solid-looking door and smashes through it. Splintered wood flying everywhere.
SFX:
Time for a big splash panel. Exterior of the church. Sara, Chi-Yun (looking normal again), James, Fred, and Jerome pour out of the smashed doorway. And driving up to meet them, probably skidding in some dramatic fashion, is Don's RV. It's a huge van, painted dark green. The side door is swinging open. DON is driving it, though we may not see him, depending on the angle.
SARA (yelling):
DON (yelling from inside van):
The group is piling in. Should be very confused; Don has only stopped for a second. In the background we can probably see the K-Men emerging from the church.
DON (yelling from inside van):
Don's POV as he looks back over his shoulder. There is a tangle of bodies in the cramped quarters behind him. Sara is looking towards him and pointing (actually at something we don't see in front of the vehicle).
DON:
SARA (yelling):
Close on Don looking forward again. Panicked look.
DON:
Exterior shot. The RV crashing into a K-MAN, which bounces off.
SFX:
Interior again, Don looking into the back of the vehicle.
DON:
SFX (from somewhere in the back):
DON (softly):
In the back, a side window has been punched in. A K-Man arm is reaching through it and grabbing Fred. James brings the edge of his shield sharply down on the K-Man's wrist.
FRED:
CAPTION (James's journal):
Exterior shot of a K-Man falling away from the broken window.
CAPTION (James's journal):
CAPTION (James's journal):
Sara climbing into the passenger seat next to Don.
SARA:
DON:
Sara sitting looking back over her shoulder. Don regarding her (not the road!) and yes, there is probably affection (and relief!) in his smile.
SARA:
SARA:
Sara looking at Don, huge grin on her face. Don watches the road, impassive.
SARA:
DON:
Sara looks away, out of her window.
SARA (softly):
Same positions.
DON:
SARA:
Close on Sara, looking out of the window. Actually looking at her reflection. And she has a big smile on her face.
DON (off-panel):
Exterior of the vehicle, merging into traffic on the highway.
DON (from vehicle):
SARA (from vehicle):
The vehicle moving into the distance, almost lost in the stream of traffic, obviously safe.
VOICE (from vehicle):
The conference room "elsewhere", as seen in the previous issue. We see the GENERAL, from behind, looking at the big electronic map display. The light over Los Angeles is still red. Next to it (superimposed on the map) a "window" has opened that shows the face of a K-Man (human form). You know, it's like a videophone picture that they have in these high-tech things.
Throughout this scene the General should be in silhouette and his uniform is never seen clearly. We shouldn't be able to see that he's a general, let alone which army he might belong to.
CAPTION:
GENERAL:
K-MAN:
Close-up on the K-Man's video image.
K-MAN:
GENERAL (off-panel):
K-MAN:
Wider view, showing a new video window opening next to the K-Man. In this, we see the face of the HACKER from last issue. He's probably eating pizza.
SFX:
GENERAL (off-panel):
Close-up of the Hacker's face.
HACKER:
Full view again, showing the General with the Hacker and K-Man on their respective video screens.
GENERAL:
K-MAN:
HACKER:
The dialogue on this page should be displayed as Chinese characters, with an English translation directly beneath each speech bubble. (Note: The Chinese given in this script may not be very accurate.)
Very tight view of the face of SPIRIT. We saw her briefly last issue, but this should be the first clear view of her face. She's Chinese (actually half-Chinese, thus her unusual hair colour), young (like 20-ish), and attractive. Her eyes are closed and her face is serene—as if meditating.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing the Hacker's speech):
CAPTION:
Same view. Spirit's eyes open and she looks to her right.
No dialogue.
Wide view. She's kneeling on the ground, outdoors. Green grass, morning sun, mountains in the background (that would be to the west, i.e. the Sun is in front of her). This is outside Spirit's cave. The old MONK from last issue has placed a small cup of tea on the grass at her side.
MONK:
TRANSLATION:
SPIRIT:
TRANSLATION:
Close up on the Monk.
MONK:
TRANSLATION:
SPIRIT (off-panel):
TRANSLATION:
Close on Spirit. Brow furrowed.
SPIRIT:
TRANSLATION:
We see, for the first time, the laptop computer on the grass in front of where Spirit kneels. She gestures at it.
SPIRIT:
TRANSLATION:
MONK (off-panel):
TRANSLATION:
Close up on Spirit again, looking up at the Monk. Still troubled.
SPIRIT:
TRANSLATION:
The RV driving down an un-lit side road. Passing two signs: "CRYSTAL LAKE CAMP GROUND" and: "CLOSED KEEP OUT".
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing Spirit's speech):
TRANSLATION:
The RV has stopped at an old camp ground. Some benches, tables, etc, but all overgrown. Surrounded by trees. The full Moon shines on a small lake. The group is getting out of the vehicle.
DON:
JAMES:
James and Don confronting each other.
DON:
JAMES:
CAPTION (James's journal):
James and Don facing off, tense. SARA can be seen in the background, looking over some sort of fire pit.
SARA:
The tension is broken. Don turns away.
DON:
CAPTION (James's journal):
This is a "talking heads" kind of page. So apart from the establishing shot of the campfire, it will have a lot of small panels with close-ups of the gang.
The group sits around a campfire in the moonlight. Possibly eating. (Note that in this panel, and at any other time where food is involved, Chi-Yun shouldn't be eating meat.)
JAMES:
DON:
CAPTION (James's journal):
Everybody looks at Sara.
SARA:
SARA:
Close up on Fred. Rolling his eyes.
FRED:
Close up on Don.
DON:
Close up on Fred. Looking heavenward.
FRED:
Close up on Don.
DON:
Close on Jerome.
JEROME:
DON (off panel):
Close on JAMES
JAMES:
Unfortunately, more exposition. To give some variety, we'll have this one as a single big panel, or fancy mix of panels, with a montage of images showing what DON is talking about (action scenes of the K-Men) and showing the group's shocked reactions.
Don's words are probably "disembodied" over the top of the images, and interspersed with James's commentary on what he's saying.
CAPTION (James's journal):
DON:
CAPTION (James's journal):
DON:
CAPTION (James's journal):
DON:
CAPTION (James's journal):
DON:
DON:
DON:
Close up of Fred.
FRED:
Close up on DON.
DON:
DON's POV looking at the circle of anxious faces over the embers of the camp fire.
DON:
Angle on FRED and CHI-YUN.
CHI-YUN:
FRED (softly):
CHI-YUN (softly):
Close up on DON. He's hating this...
DON:
JAMES's POV, looking at the others. No-one looks happy as this sinks in.
CAPTION (James's journal):
Close up of SARA, playing with a stick in the fire.
CAPTION (James's journal):
Close up on the SHIELD which JAMES has never let out of his hands.
CAPTION (James's journal):
Wide shot as DON stands and stretches.
DON:
CAPTION (James's journal):
Next issue: Trust
See also: Don's mission report; Los Angeles Globe news headlines
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