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The events of this issue take place several days after the previous issue. Chronologically, they take place a couple of days after ISSUE #16. In contrast to ISSUE #16, the weather is dry and clear. Characters are dressed suitably for October in Northern Illinois.
Narration in this issue is in the form of SARA's internal first-person monologue (which should be indicated on-panel by a distinctive "hand-writing" lettering). These captions will be marked in the script.
A small close-up of SARA's face, gazing out over an expanse of forested hills.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
This panel is the dominant one on the page. It's a road running through the aforementioned hills. The road curves around a hillside with a wooded slope up to the right (from our POV) and a steep slope down to the left. A safety barrier guards the drop to the left but a section of the barrier has been torn open as if a speeding vehicle has crashed through it. (This is exactly what happened, as you would know if you were paying attention last issue. And if you weren't, don't worry because the characters will start discussing it soon.) It is this smashed railing that SARA is standing by, looking out over the tree tops. Behind her, FRED and JEROME are kneeling and examining tyre marks on the road. JAMES is examining the broken railing. We might see the group's rented SUV and FRED's motorcycle parked nearby, but it's not important. Note that everybody is wearing regular outdoor clothing, including JAMES who is not in costume for a change.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
CAPTION:
CAPTION:
Close-up on FRED and JEROME examining the tyre marks.
FRED:
JEROME:
SARA still stands looking out over the forest.
SARA:
A wider view of SARA at the road edge, to include JAMES.
JAMES:
JAMES now stands beside SARA, following her gaze.
JAMES:
SARA:
CHI-YUN (off panel, below them):
Down among the trees, CHI-YUN and JAMES stand examining huge gouge marks in the soft ground. The marks have been left by the impact of DON's RV as it landed after crashing off the road, as shown last issue. Wheel tracks then continue down the slope. Note that CHI-YUN is in her fairly-usual Chinese-teen form.
JAMES:
CHI-YUN:
JAMES looks back towards the road, which is some distance away. There is indeed a ten-metre cliff (which we can see SARA, JEROME, and FRED carefully making their way down). The vehicle must have leaped off it and not landed until it reached the spot where JAMES and CHI-YUN are. The distance looks frankly unbelievable.
JAMES:
Further down the slope, the whole group is walking more-or-less together, following the wheel tracks.
FRED:
SARA:
FRED:
They reach the RV. It's sitting in exactly the same position it was at the end of the last issue. Crashed. There is no sign of DON.
JAMES:
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
SARA is inside the RV. It's a wreck. Not just from the crash, it looks ransacked. Cupboards are open and contents are spilled around, items smashed on the floor.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
CHI-YUN has moved into the RV behind SARA.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
CHI-YUN:
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
JEROME (off-panel):
Outside again, they are gathered around a spot on the ground. JEROME is crouching and gesturing at the ground.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
JEROME:
Small close-up of the object of JEROME's attention: a spent cartridge case from a firearm.
JEROME:
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
Close-up of JAMES holding up the cartridge and examining it closely.
JAMES:
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
FRED takes the cartridge from JAMES.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
FRED:
In a big action panel, DON is in the woods, roughly where the group is currently standing (but there is no sign of them). He looks badly banged-up (by the crash, as described at the end of last issue). He is firing his gun at a K-MAN who leaps at him. The bullet has struck the K-MAN squarely in the chest. This is obviously not happening *now*. In fact, it's one of FRED's visions. The colours in the panel should be muted, or some other device to show it's not "real".
No dialogue.
A small panel with a close-up of the firing gun. We should see the flash and smoke from the muzzle and the spent cartridge case being ejected from it.
No dialogue.
Another small close-up of the cartridge falling through the air.
No dialogue.
And another as it hits the ground at the point where JEROME found it.
No dialogue.
Back to a "present" panel, this one showing a close up on FRED's face as he holds the bullet case in front of it.
FRED:
FRED points off into the forest.
FRED:
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
SARA leads the way into the forest. CHI-YUN is kneeling with her nose right down to the ground.
SARA:
JEROME:
SFX (CHI-YUN):
CHI-YUN:
Everybody is suddenly alert, looking nervously into the surrounding forest.
JAMES:
Close-up on CHI-YUN, still crouching.
CHI-YUN:
SFX (CHI-YUN):
Identical panel, but the crouching CHI-YUN is now a large bloodhound.
CHI-YUN-DOG:
CHI-YUN-DOG goes bounding into the forest, past SARA.
CHI-YUN-DOG:
They are now standing on another hillside road, very similar to the one they started on (but not the same). The road is empty and they are all looking at CHI-YUN-DOG, who sniffles in an aimless sort of manner.
SARA:
CHI-YUN changes back into human form, still crouching down low.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN and SARA are standing facing each other. SARA looks angry. In the background, FRED kneels and places his hand flat on the road surface.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
FRED:
Another of FRED's psychic flashbacks. DON limps on to the road -- the same road where they are now standing -- waving his arms at a pickup heading towards him. It's a beaten-up, old, truck with one driver and several shapes in the back.
No dialogue.
Still in flashback. The truck has stopped (or slowed) and DON is climbing into the back -- and we can now plainly see that the large shapes are, in fact, PIGS!
No dialogue.
FRED stands and looks at the others.
FRED:
CHI-YUN:
FRED:
CHI-YUN:
FRED is gesturing to make his points.
FRED:
JAMES:
FRED:
SARA is moving off again, back down into the woods.
SARA:
JAMES:
SARA:
FRED catches up to SARA.
FRED:
She turns and flashes him a brilliant smile.
SARA:
JAMES stands outside SAM WEAVER's electronics shop (last seen in ISSUE 17. The view needs to be wide enough for the reader to recognise the shop. JAMES has his face against the window, hands cupped around his eyes in the way that you do when you're trying to see in through a window. (We see JAMES from behind, naturally).
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
Close-up view of the back of JAMES's head while he's looking through the window. But now we see a reflection in the glass beside him -- a K-MAN (in human form) is standing right behind him! We'll call this K-MAN #3, just to distinguish him from #1 and #2 seen last issue.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
JAMES has turned to face the K-MAN. Both men look wary but neither makes any kind of hostile move.
JAMES:
K-MAN #3:
JAMES watches the K-MAN walk away.
No dialogue.
JAMES is in the same position and JEROME had walked up behind him, carrying a folded newspaper. JAMES continues to stare in the direction the K-MAN went.
JAMES:
JEROME:
JEROME hands the newspaper to JAMES.
JAMES:
A view of the newspaper in JAMES's hands as he reads it. There is a photograph of SAM WEAVER, the headline "LOCAL MAN KILLED BY WILD ANIMAL" and, in smaller type underneath, the strap-line "Experts Baffled by Attack". The text of the story can be greeked.
No dialogue.
JAMES folds the newspaper again, looking at JEROME.
JAMES:
JEROME watches JAMES walk off.
JEROME:
SARA and CHI-YUN sit in a booth in a diner. The diner is the one we saw in ISSUE 17. They have their heads together, talking. A waitress approaches.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
SARA:
The waitress now stands at the table and they all look up at her.
WAITRESS:
CHI-YUN:
The waitress looks at CHI-YUN. CHI-YUN looks at the waitress.
SARA:
WAITRESS:
WAITRESS:
Still sitting in the diner. The waitress is walking away from the table and they now have a variety of pies and drinks in front of them. SARA's phone (in her pocket) is ringing -- the ring-tone SFX is illustrated with little musical notes.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
SFX (phone):
Close-up of SARA raising her phone to her ear.
SARA:
A close up of FRED talking into his own phone. He's outside, but we don't need to show any background details (yet).
FRED:
SARA (from phone):
In a wider panel, we see that FRED is sitting on his motorbike, parked. On the opposite side of the street is an ordinary house. (Maybe we can see a sign saying "rooms available", but it's not really important to the story.) Two men are leaving the house. They are K-MAN #1 and K-MAN #2, in civilian clothes, as seen last issue. They are walking casually, maybe talking, but they are paying no attention to FRED.
FRED:
Same view as above, but now a pick-up truck is driving along the street, between FRED and the K-MEN. It's the truck FRED saw in his vision on PAGE 7.
FRED:
In the diner, SARA has her phone to her ear.
SARA:
SARA:
Out in the street, FRED is on his motorcycle, following the pickup truck.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
The truck has stopped outside a store -- hardware store or something -- and a woman gets out. She's middle-aged, slim, attractive, long red hair tied back, and dressed in denim work clothes. We'll call her MARY-LOU. FRED is in the background, sitting on his bike and observing.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
FRED is at the pickup and has his hand laid against the side.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
A "psychic flashback" panel: DON lies flat in the truck, surrounded by pigs.
No dialogue.
MARY-LOU comes out of the store with a package in her hands. She sees FRED fondling her truck.
MARY-LOU:
FRED:
She gives him a look as she climbs into the truck.
No dialogue.
Watching her drive off, FRED makes no move to follow. Instead, he lights a cigarette.
SARA (off panel):
SARA is running over, phone to her ear.
SARA:
She is now next to FRED, looking agitated. He looks unconcerned.
SARA:
FRED:
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
Later, the others have arrived. They listen to FRED as he relates his findings. (Their vehicles may be visible in the background.)
FRED:
FRED sits on his motorbike, helmet on, about to start off. JAMES has his hand on FRED's arm.
JAMES:
FRED faces JAMES, but we can't see his face through the visor of his helmet.
FRED:
FRED:
FRED is driving off (away from our POV) as JAMES looks after him.
SFX (bike):
JAMES (softly):
From a distance, we see the SUV pull away (the team inside, obviously), following the bike. In the foreground, K-MAN #3 is watching them.
No dialogue.
FRED, on his bike, pulls into a farmyard, next to MARY-LOU's truck. Actually, as farms go, it isn't much of one. No rolling wheat fields here (remember the terrain!). We see a house, a barn, maybe a couple of other small sheds, a chicken coup, perhaps. And, of course, a pig pen. It's nestled in a valley between wooded slopes. Apart from the unsurfaced road that FRED has driven up, there is a dirt track that leads out the "back way", past the farm house. It isn't necessary to show all of this detail in one panel but it may be glimpsed in the background of subsequent panels.
No dialogue.
FRED has dismounted and taken his helmet off. MARY-LOU stands on the porch, a rifle held casually in her hands.
MARY-LOU:
FRED:
The team's SUV pulls up behind him.
FRED:
JAMES, SARA, JEROME, and CHI-YUN get out of the SUV.
JAMES:
DON (off-panel):
DON is stepping out of the barn. And he doesn't look particularly good. He's disheveled and has a few days' growth of beard. One arm is in a sling and he's using an improvised crutch with his other arm.
No dialogue.
SARA has thrown herself at DON; her arms are wrapped around him.
SARA (shouting):
DON:
JAMES is shaking DON's hand. SARA, JEROME, and CHI-YUN are nearby. All are smiling big smiles.
JAMES:
DON:
A wider panel shows FRED hanging back from the general merriment. JAMES gestures towards him.
JAMES:
DON claps FRED on the shoulder.
DON:
FRED:
Inside the farm house, around the kitchen table, the gang sits and drinks coffee. By gang, I mean DON, SARA, JAMES, and JEROME. FRED is also there but lounging against a counter, characteristically apart from the others. CHI-YUN is absent.
DON:
SARA:
DON:
Close-up on DON as he continues this chunk of exposition.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
DON:
JAMES (probably off-panel):
DON:
In a wider view, DON smiles at SARA. She's not smiling back, though. She's pensive.
DON:
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
DON suddenly looks round, concerned.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
DON:
JAMES:
Outside, a black-and-white cat sits in a tree, overlooking the road that leads to the farm. It is yawning.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing JAMES's last speech):
SFX:
The cat stands on the branch and looks down a long expanse of road. In the distance, we see two jeeps coming towards the cat. They are the same vehicles we saw at the end of ISSUE 17 (though they should be too far away to see details clearly).
SFX:
The cat leaps from the tree to the ground. In this panel we see it an instant before it hits the ground --
No dialogue.
-- and now we see it landing. Except, it's not a small black-and-white cat any more. It's a big, lean, muscular cheetah. But from the identical panel and the cheetah's leaping posture, it should be obvious to the reader that it's the same animal.
No dialogue.
The cheetah is racing up the track to the farm, as only cheetahs can...
No dialogue.
Back in the kitchen, the back door flies open and the cheetah bounds in.
CHEETAH:
In a wider view of the kitchen, everybody looks towards the cheetah, unconcerned. Except for MARY-LOU, who has entered the kitchen. She is VERY concerned.
MARY-LOU:
CHI-YUN now stands where the cheetah was.
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN:
Everybody looks at CHI-YUN, momentarily frozen.
CHI-YUN:
Everybody is suddenly moving, standing and going towards the back door. JEROME helps DON to his feet.
JEROME:
DON and JEROME both look towards MARY-LOU, who looks back uncertainly.
DON:
DON:
DON stands facing MARY-LOU, his hands on her arms.
MARY-LOU:
DON:
Close-up on their faces.
MARY-LOU:
DON:
MARY-LOU:
Wider panel, to include JAMES in the conversation.
JAMES:
DON:
Outside, DON and MARY-LOU are getting into the SUV. She has a small bag. The others are already inside.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
The SUV drives off towards the track behind the farmhouse. FRED leads the way on his motorcycle and CHI-YUN, in CHEETAH form, races alongside.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
Identical scene to panel 2, with the vehicles no longer in sight.
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
CAPTION (SARA's monologue):
Same scene again. Two jeeps have arrived in the farm yard.
No dialogue.
K-MAN #1 holds a phone to his ear. In the background, we can see more K-MEN searching the area.
K-MAN #1:
Next issue: Huey's Place
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