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This issue is set in various locations and at different times of day so I won't make any sweeping statements here. For a change, the issue has no first-person narrator. Everything will be carried in on-panel dialogue, with "location" captions to identify scene changes where necessary.
A poker table. Not some professional casino, this is somebody's kitchen table. Cards, chips (both kinds), and beer bottles are scattered around. Three people sit around the table though we don't need to show them in this view (maybe we are looking down on the table from directly above?). These are the three Canadian RCMP officers seen in ISSUE 12 PAGE 18: MILLER, LaROQUE, and PIKEY. Yes, it's a stereotypical cops' poker night.
MILLER (off-panel):
LaROQUE (off-panel):
PIKEY (off-panel):
CAPTION:
Now we'll have a regular view of the room, including all three police officers: older, heavy-set, balding SERGEANT MILLER; red-haired, female CONSTABLE LaROQUE; young, muscular, grungy CONSTABLE PIKEY. All are in casual clothes. We might see that PIKEY has a firearm in a shoulder holster over his t-shirt.
MILLER:
LaROQUE:
CAPTION:
PIKEY is standing and stretching. The others remain at the table.
MILLER:
MILLER:
PIKEY:
CAPTION:
PIKEY heads towards the door, putting a jacket on as he goes.
MILLER (off-panel):
LaROQUE (off-panel):
PIKEY:
The page should be dominated by panel 3, a big splash of action. Panels 1 and 2 sit above it, occupying only as much space as they need to set the scene effectively.
A city street at night. PIKEY is walking along, hands in pockets (same clothing as the previous scene), whistling.
No dialogue.
He stops and peers into a dimly-lit alley. Maybe he's taken a step into it. There's a man in the darkness but the silhouette should be very indistinct. PIKEY is reaching into his jacket where (readers should remember) he has his gun.
PIKEY:
This is the big panel. A K-MAN, in wolf form but still wearing human clothing and the familiar long black coat, is lunging at PIKEY. One clawed hand swings and bats the gun from PIKEY's hand -- very violently, as his torn sleeve and splattering blood should illustrate. PIKEY wears a look of fear and pain.
PIKEY:
K-MAN #1:
The K-MAN attacks again, a downward slash of the claws which opens up PIKEY's chest. Again, we need lots of blood to highlight the real violence of the attack.
K-MAN #1:
PIKEY is now on the ground, though we don't need to show him in the panel. The K-MAN is standing over him, not striking. Behind the K-MAN, a second man is now visible. This is another K-MAN, as his identical clothing should indicate, but he's in human form. This second man has his hand on the first's shoulder, as if to hold him back.
K-MAN #2:
Same scene but the first K-MAN is now in human form.
K-MAN #1:
K-MAN #2:
K-MAN #2 has spun K-MAN #1 round to face him and is shouting in his face.
K-MAN #2:
K-MAN #1:
K-MAN #2:
A bedroom. Night. In the darkness, we can make out the balding head of a sleeping man. It's the GENERAL but it may not be possible to recognise him, out of uniform and from an unusual viewpoint. Note that he's sleeping alone. On the nightstand, a telephone rings.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing the K-MAN's speech):
SFX (telephone):
The GENERAL answers the phone.
GENERAL:
VOICE (from phone):
The GENERAL's conference room, last seen in ISSUE 11. The GENERAL and the SPY are both present. The GENERAL is in Marine Corps uniform -- no need to conceal his affiliations with the US military any more, I think the readers have had enough clues.
CAPTION:
CAPTION:
SPY:
Close-up on the GENERAL's sweating face.
GENERAL:
SPY (off-panel):
The GENERAL raises a glass of water to his lips as he regards the SPY.
GENERAL:
The SPY is now raising a telephone to his ear, presumably about to give orders.
GENERAL:
SPY:
Daylight. A city. Specifically, the exterior of a shopping mall. If it's not obvious what it is, we can include a sign: "QUEENSTOWN MALL". (Name unimportant -- just something to set the scene.)
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing SPY's thought):
VOICE (from inside mall):
CAPTION:
Inside the mall. It's a female-clothing store. SARA is wearing a big, sky-blue coat trimmed with white fur -- just the thing for the Canadian winter. (It's fake fur, of course. I know there's no way to convey this point on a comic panel, I just thought I ought to mention it.) She's examining the coat in a full-length mirror. CHI-YUN sits on a nearby chair, looking bored.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
SARA turns an exasperated look on CHI-YUN.
SARA:
CHI-YUN (softly):
SARA is sorting through a rack of clothing.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
SARA holds out a horribly cute pink jacket with flowers or hearts or something.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN:
An ordinary city street, elsewhere in the city. FRED is riding his motorcycle down the street, minding his own business. (If the reader can't recognise him from the bike, leather jacket, and helmet -- well, tough, I'm not going to give any more clues in the dialogue.)
CAPTION (voice-over):
A woman emerges from a store, carrying a bag or package (it doesn't matter what). She's looking at FRED and her look is... perplexed. She has long, straight blonde hair and is wearing a white fur coat. Perceptive readers should be able to recognise FAITH, minion of the TEMPLE OF UNITY from ISSUE 6.
No dialogue.
FAITH is now climbing into the back of a big, black, expensive, Cadillac-type car. Waiting for her in the back seat is BROTHER THOMAS of the TEMPLE OF UNITY.
THOMAS:
FAITH:
FAITH:
They sit side-by-side in the back of the car as it pulls away.
THOMAS:
FAITH:
He turns and cuts her off angrily.
THOMAS:
THOMAS:
An exterior view of the car as it turns on to some kind of big empty lot. There is a large marquee in the background and in the foreground we need to see a large billboard saying:
TEMPLE OF UNITY
HELP FOR BODY AND MIND
ALL WELCOME
(This is mainly to remind readers who haven't yet connected these people with the TEMPLE in previous issues.)
THOMAS (from car):
A large, high-ceilinged, windowless office. Walls and floor seem to be austere white marble, with pseudo-classical half-pillars lining the walls. A single large black desk (possibly also marble) is the main feature of the room. On the wall behind the desk is a world political map. Sitting at the desk is a single figure reading from a screen mounted on the desk. He is dressed immaculately in a dark grey suit. It's PARSIFAL, last seen in ISSUE 7.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing THOMAS's speech):
CAPTION:
CAPTION:
VOICE (off-panel):
A second man is now standing at the desk and handing PARSIFAL a sheet of paper. This man is tall and slim with very short blonde hair. He is dressed in a black uniform: just a buttoned-up, high-collared jacket and plain trousers tucked into knee-high boots, but the effect should be vaguely military in appearance. On the jacket's collar is an emblem: a silver "0" with a line through it. And at his waist is a sword: a duelling sabre with an ornate hand guard. I will label this man's captions with his code name, WEAPON MASTER, though PARSIFAL will refer to him by his real name, JOHANN, in this scene. (Anybody noticing a faint Germanic theme going on here? Am I being too heavy-handed?)
WEAPON MASTER:
PARSIFAL:
PARSIFAL stands, back to WEAPON MASTER, regarding the map.
PARSIFAL:
WEAPON MASTER:
PARSIFAL turns angrily on the WEAPON MASTER.
PARSIFAL:
PARSIFAL:
WEAPON MASTER stands stiffly at attention, with the demeanour of a man who doesn't usually tolerate people shouting at him.
WEAPON MASTER:
PARSIFAL
PARSIFAL
Big action splash panel! It's an indoor scene: a small warehouse. The background has shelving with various crates and boxes. All innocuous stuff: TVs, computers, and similar electrical goods. In the foreground, however, are a couple of open crates and our POV should allow us to see that these hold weapons -- assault rifles. And this is obviously neither a police nor an army building, so the reader can hopefully deduce that the occupants are up to no good.
But all that is incidental. The focus of the scene is SPIRIT. She's dressed in dark, tight-fitting "Western" garb, not her usual bulky Chinese robes. And in each hand she holds, at the ready, a TONFA (a martial arts weapon; we saw her with them in ISSUE 9). Her hair is bound into a long braid. And she looks mean. In fact, she looks, meanly, at a man who is backed against a wall (or shelf, or something) and is in obvious terror of her. He's big, Caucasian, muscular -- he's a foot taller than her and over twice her mass, making their poses incongruous (even though she's armed and he isn't). But the sweat of fear on his face is unmistakable.
Oh, and his fear may be explained by the bodies of three other big, tough guys that lie around the place amid unmistakable signs of a fight.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing PARSIFAL's speech):
CAPTION:
SPIRIT:
CAPTION (voice-over, leading into speech on next page):
A busy city diner. People are eating lunch, talking, and generally behaving exactly as you would expect people to behave in a busy city diner. In the foreground, a casually-dressed man sits reading a newspaper (the sports pages) over a cup of coffee (decaf) and a bagel. This is ROGER STEVENS, mayor of New York City, as subsequent dialogue will hopefully explain. He's in his 50s but youthful, tanned, and athletic. He has steely blue eyes, a square jaw, and short blonde hair which we can't see because of his "NEW YORK YANKEES" baseball cap. He's sitting by a window but we don't need to see out of it in this panel.
The woman who is standing next to his table and speaking is of similar age and is also dressed casually -- but while he's in "blue-collar" clothes, she looks like she's come from the office. Her hair is also short and blonde, her eyes are also blue, and she is also in good shape. She may be close to 50. This is STEPHANIE ELLIOT.
ELLIOT:
CAPTION:
STEVENS looks up at her and raises an eyebrow.
STEVENS:
Now he is standing and they are hugging.
ELLIOT:
STEVENS:
Now they are sitting opposite each other while a waitress pours ELLIOT's coffee.
ELLIOT:
STEVENS:
ELLIOT:
She watches the waitress walk away.
ELLIOT:
STEVENS:
Close-up on STEVENS as he sips his coffee.
STEVENS:
STEVENS:
Close-up on ELLIOT.
ELLIOT:
STEVENS (off-panel):
ELLIOT:
Wider view of the two of them again. In the background, people go about their business.
STEVENS:
ELLIOT:
She delivers the next line just as STEVENS is drinking coffee. His reaction is to spray coffee all over the table.
ELLIOT:
STEVENS:
STEVENS is mopping up the mess on the table.
STEVENS:
A hotel suite. JAMES, wearing his costume but not his cowl, sits talking with PAUL SMITHSTEEN. The SHIELD is on the floor, propped against JAMES's chair.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing STEVENS' speech):
PAUL:
JAMES:
CAPTION:
Close-up on PAUL, showing his "concerned" look (remember, this man is a trained psychiatrist).
PAUL:
An angle showing JAMES looking at the SHIELD -- with the SHIELD as the main focus of the panel.
PAUL (off-panel):
A wide view of the room to include the door -- which has burst open to admit an excited CHI-YUN and a more restrained (and shopping-laden) SARA.
CHI-YUN (shouting):
SARA:
PAUL (softly):
CHI-YUN throws herself into a chair next to JAMES.
CHI-YUN:
JAMES (softly):
CHI-YUN:
FRED (off-panel):
FRED is standing in the door behind CHI-YUN, helmet in one hand, unzipping his leathers. CHI-YUN turns to look at him.
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN:
FRED:
Wider view to include SARA in the conversation. She's trying not to laugh.
SARA:
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
A view of the entire group. Everybody looks at each other.
No dialogue.
Same view as the previous panel -- everybody looks at CHI-YUN.
SARA:
A bit of a talking-heads page -- sorry, I can't think of a way to make this visually interesting but it's got to be here.
Close-up on CHI-YUN and JAMES.
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
CHI-YUN:
Close-up on PAUL.
PAUL:
FRED is sitting away from the group or, more likely, leaning against a wall (which he seems to like to do for some reason).
FRED:
SARA and CHI-YUN:
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
CHI-YUN and JAMES again. CHI-YUN pouts.
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
Close-up on FRED again.
FRED:
The alley seen on pages 2 and 3, now in daylight. And it's a police crime scene (no surprise there). This should be a big panel to establish the scene properly: uniformed officers, medical examiner, man taking photographs of a body, and so on. Except we won't show the body -- there isn't really any need. LaROQUE and MILLER are here, in plain clothes. MILLER talks to a uniformed officer while LaROQUE just looks at the (off-panel) body with an expression of shock and horror.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing FRED's speech):
CAPTION:
LaROQUE (softly):
MILLER turns LaROQUE away from the scene with an arm around her shoulders.
MILLER:
She looks up at him.
LaROQUE (softly):
MILLER:
MILLER:
In some kind of coffee shop, MILLER and LaROQUE sit alone at a table. She cups her coffee in two hands as she sips it; his is on the table.
LaROQUE:
MILLER:
She puts down her coffee and looks at him.
LaROQUE:
MILLER:
LaROQUE:
MILLER:
Close-up on his face, wearing a puzzled frown.
MILLER (softly):
He is standing, his hand on LaROQUE's shoulder. She looks up at him.
MILLER:
LaROQUE:
She's now standing next to him; a calm, efficient cop once more.
MILLER:
She calls after him as he walks away.
LaROQUE:
MILLER:
The exterior of a large but nondescript building. There is no clue as to what might go on behind the many windows -- but a uniformed RCMP officer guarding the main door and a Canadian flag should give the reader the idea that it's somewhat official.
CAPTION:
SFX:
VOICE (from inside building):
An interior office. It's fairly small and lined with shelves overflowing with files. The computer on the desk is almost hidden by stacks of paper. A man sits at the desk, or rather lounges with his chair tipped back and his feet on the desk, and talks into a telephone. (It should be a cordless phone because I might want him to get up and wander around the office in a minute.) This is SEBASTIAN MAKEPEACE and his name should be displayed on a plaque clearly visible on his desk. He's probably in his late 40s. He wears an immaculate suit and has short, neatly-groomed hair -- his appearance is much tidier than his office. He has a wide grin on his face.
MAKEPEACE:
MAKEPEACE:
MAKEPEACE:
He now sits upright and looks serious.
MAKEPEACE:
He's now walking across the office (aha, told you). (In fact, his phone probably shouldn't be cordless because it will be funnier if he's struggling to disentangle the cord from around the junk on his desk.) Now that he is standing, it might be possible to see that he's extremely tall -- at least 6'8" (or over two metres, as the Canadians would say).
MAKEPEACE:
MAKEPEACE:
With the phone wedged under his chin, he's using a small key to undo the locks on a long, narrow, metal case that sits on top of a cabinet.
MAKEPEACE:
The case is now open: it's a gun case and it fills this panel. And inside is a HUGE shotgun. I mean, this is the mother of all shotguns. This is the kind of shotgun you use to hunt polar bears. Giant, armour-plated polar bears.
MAKEPEACE (off-panel):
Two figures walk through Central Park -- ROGER STEVENS and STEPHANIE ELLIOT, dressed as they were in their previous appearance. It's now probably late afternoon. This can be a long view of them, to establish the park setting.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing MAKEPEACE's speech):
CAPTION:
ELLIOT:
Same scene, closer in on them talking.
ELLIOT:
STEVENS:
ELLIOT:
They have stopped walking and are facing each other.
ELLIOT:
STEVENS:
ELLIOT:
Extreme close-up on their faces: serious looks as she hold his eyes.
ELLIOT:
STEVENS:
ELLIOT:
A doctor's office or laboratory. The walls have monitors which show various anatomical displays: things like skeleton, blood flow, body temperature, etc. None of it needs to actually mean anything. There should also be a display of at least one K-MAN (I mean, they are all K-MEN images, but one needs to be an "exterior" view to make it obvious). One wall has a wide picture window which looks into another large room but this does not need to be seen clearly in this view.
The GENERAL and the DOCTOR (not seen since ISSUE 1 are both present. She is obviously very angry about something.
CAPTION (voice-over continuing ELLIOT's speech):
CAPTION:
GENERAL:
DOCTOR:
Now we can show the view through the window, over the GENERAL's shoulder as he stands looking through it. The room beyond is a gymnasium with a variety of equipment -- weight machines, free weights, treadmills. Three treadmills are occupied: one by a K-MAN in HUMAN form (and suitable work-out clothing) and the other two by K-MEN in WOLF form (naked).
GENERAL:
The Doctor is studying some graphs on a wall monitor.
DOCTOR:
GENERAL (off-panel):
DOCTOR:
GENERAL (off-panel):
She turns to confront him; he's facing her, back to the window.
DOCTOR:
GENERAL:
The GENERAL leaves by the office door. She stares after his retreating back.
DOCTOR (softly):
GENERAL:
A large, opulently-furnished room which seems to be hosting a high-class cocktail party. The walls are hung with heavy drapes and art nouveau scupltures rest on small tables. A small gathering of people, no more than 20, stands in small groups sipping champagne and talking. Most of the men are in well-tailored suits. In the foreground, the focus is on two figures who stand out from the norm. One is a huge, muscular African-American, possibly 30 or 40, who wears a loose, open robe that shows off his bare chest and muscular arms. This is THE LEOPARD. Speaking to him, and quite petite by comparison, is a woman -- the only woman visible in the room. She wears a long blue gown, has her hair arranged elaborately on top of her head, and wears large diamonds in her ears. And readers will hopefully recognise her as SARA's mother -- SYLVIA ROTH.
CAPTION (voice-over continuing GENERAL's speech):
CAPTION:
LEOPARD:
SYLVIA:
LEOPARD:
She sips delicately from a champagne glass.
SYLVIA:
LEOPARD:
LEOPARD:
She smiles sweetly up at him and puts one hand against his cheek in a friendly (condescending?) gesture.
SYLVIA:
SYLVIA:
She moves off.
SYLVIA:
CONSTABLE LaROQUE sits at a computer terminal in a tiny office. Through the glass walls of the office we can see a police squad room: several detectives at desks and (just to make it obvious where we are) a couple of guys in RCMP uniforms. In the background, a figure in a long, disreputable raincoat is talking to a uniformed officer who indicates LaROQUE's office.
CAPTION (voice-over continuing SYLVIA's speech):
LaROQUE:
LaROQUE:
CAPTION:
The door to the office is now open and the man in the raincoat is looking in. We should now see him clearly. He's middle-aged, has an untidy shock of black hair, dark stubble, and a crumpled shirt under his raincoat. Think of Peter Falk. He's also wearing a "visitor" badge on which the reader might be able to make out his name: PAUL CHANT.
CHANT:
LaROQUE (off-panel):
We can now show both of them as he steps forward and holds out his hand (which she, still seated, ignores).
CHANT:
LaROQUE:
He has taken a step behind her to study something on the wall (a map or chart or something). She swivels to face him.
CHANT:
LaROQUE:
He has now turned to face her and she seems unaware of the fact that he's reading the computer screen behind her. (We don't need to actually show the reader what's on the screen. In fact, it's probably hard to convey that he's reading it but the conclusion should be there for any reader that wants to draw it.)
CHANT:
Another hotel suite. SPIRIT exits the bathroom and crosses the room. She's wearing a big fluffy white bathrobe, of the sort you get in hotel rooms, and is drying her hair with a towel.
CAPTION (voice-over continuing CHANT's speech):
CAPTION:
SPIRIT:
She sits on the bed (not a chair -- she doesn't like chairs) (no, don't ask me why) and begins brushing her hair, wincing as she pulls the brush through it.
SPIRIT:
A laptop computer, on a desk in the same room. We should be able to read the screen quite clearly. It displays the following text:
09/29/2015 18:52 EST
There are signs that point to Parsifal's survival but I am no closer to
finding him. It is obvious that
Black Zero has been covertly rebuilding its operation for several years.
Fennec did not ow Fennec didn't shut it down permanently.
But the structure is very cellular. It makes it difficult to_
SPIRIT (off-panel):
The same screen with the same text but a new window has popped-up on it (probably obscuring some of the text). The message in the window reads:
INCOMING TEXT MAIL
SENDER: DON NEWMAN
SFX:
SPIRIT stands and is moving towards the computer.
SPIRIT:
The view of the computer screen again, this time showing an e-mail message window. The window contains the following text:
TO: Spirit
FROM: Don
SUBJECT: Final Mail
I'm going to record everything I can. Because if you're getting this it
probably
means I didn't make it. I let the wolves get too close. I'm copying
this mail to the kids, too. Maybe some of it will help them
avoid the mistakes I made. Kids, do not, I repeat, do not, under any
circumstances
(The window should cut the text off at this point. There is more text but I don't want to reveal it all yet, though some of it will be in the caption on the next page.)
No dialogue.
A big splash panel of SARA. She's wearing the over-sized t-shirt that she likes to sleep in and standing in a doorway, looking directly out-of-panel at us. It's dark but there is light coming from the room behind her, back-lighting her. She has a hand-held computer in one hand, and though she's not looking at it the light from the screen illuminates her face. (That all sounds nicely artistic.) Her face shows a mixture of shock and grief.
CAPTION ("computer" typeface, continuing DON's e-mail):
SARA (shouting):
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