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This issue begins at night and a lot of the action will take place outside in darkness. The darkness should add atmosphere but never actually obscure the action. It's raining throughout most of the story and this should be portrayed on-panel where appropriate. The location is still Washington state and scenery should be suitable for the region (generally, the exterior views will show heavy forest).
PAUL begins the scenario in his JEROME SANDERS personality and his captions will be labelled as such. Note that JEROME's captions use British spelling where appropriate (everybody else should use US spelling).
Most narration in this issue is in the form of DON's "mission reports" (effectively a running monologue). These should be indicated on-panel by a distinctive type face (something boring but reliable, eg Times). These "mission report" captions will be marked as such in the script.
An exterior view of DON's RV driving along a dark, deserted highway.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
Looking in through the rain-slicked front window of the RV, we see DON's indistinct outline.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
Same view. The wiper blades cut through the rain and we see DON clearly through the window.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
SFX (wipers):
Now we see the RV from the inside, DON's POV: he grips the wheel with both hands and stares at the road ahead.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
SFX (wipers):
DON stands, looking out of another rain-slicked window. But this is a wide picture window and we can see a sweep of city lights far below. He's dressed the same as he is "today", however.
CAPTION:
DON:
He turns and we can see the room behind him -- a large, high-class hotel room. The only other occupant is SPIRIT. She's sitting cross-legged on a large couch. She's in casual "Western" clothing and her hair is loose.
SPIRIT:
DON:
SPIRIT is now standing and looking up at DON (there is a noticeable difference in height).
SPIRIT:
DON:
DON turns away from her and paces across the room.
SPIRIT (off-panel):
SPIRIT (off-panel):
DON is at a side table on which lies two TONFAS -- the martial arts weapons we saw SPIRIT with last issue. He regards them.
DON:
SPIRIT (off-panel):
DON turns and looks at her.
SPIRIT:
Panel 1 should dominate this page as it's intended to set the scene where much of the issue's action will take place. The other "detail" panels can be overlaid on the main panel or show in a strip below it, as suitable.
Another road. It has steeply wooded banks on either side. An articulated truck has jack-knifed across the road so that the trailer (a big, solid thing) sits across both lanes and blocks them completely. The tractor is twisted so that it points directly up the road, towards our POV. Its headlight beams illuminate six men. They all wear dark coats, buttoned up against the rain, and have short "military-style" haircuts. In fact, they look a lot like K-MEN in their human form (probably because that's exactly what they are). Some carry guns.
CAPTION (continuing SPIRIT's speech):
CAPTION:
Close-up of two of the K-MEN studying a map on a hand-held computer. One of them (the one speaking) is pointing.
K-MAN:
Close-up of a different K-MAN slamming a magazine into a weapon -- an M16 assault rifle.
SFX (gun):
K-MAN (off-panel):
One of the K-MEN is in WOLFMAN form. He bares his teeth in a snarl.
K-MAN:
K-MAN (off-panel):
Close-up on the cold (human) eyes of the first K-MAN as he speaks.
K-MAN:
Inside the RV, JAMES is climbing into the passenger seat next to DON. JAMES is fully costumed and masked. He's not carrying the SHIELD right now.
JAMES:
DON:
Close-up of the satellite navigation display, which shows the same map as the K-MEN were examining. A red dot (presumably the position of the RV) is at the intersection of two roads. One of the roads is marked in green. DON's finger is tapping the screen.
DON (off-panel):
A rear view of DON and JAMES, sitting side-by-side. JAMES is turning his head to look back into the body of the vehicle (towards us).
DON:
JAMES:
We now see the back of the RV from JAMES's POV. JEROME has his shirt off and SARA is wrapping (fresh) bandages round him. CHI-YUN sits nearby, her attention on JAMES's shield (lying on the table). FRED sits further back, in his favoured position, smoke from his cigarette curling out of a window.
SARA:
JEROME:
JEROME carefully puts his shirt back on. Note that it's a white shirt. This will become important later. (Hmm... have I just given away what's coming?)
JEROME:
Close-up of FRED as he flicks his cigarette butt through the window.
FRED (softly):
JEROME (off-panel):
FRED:
SARA sits next to CHI-YUN.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN reaches a hand towards -- but doesn't touch -- the SHIELD on the table. We should clearly be able to see the silver pentagram design on it.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
CHI-YUN snatches her hand back.
SARA:
Looking from SARA's POV towards where JAMES and DON are in the front.
SARA (softly):
Back on DON in the cab.
DON:
From DON's POV, looking through the windscreen, we can see the jack-knifed trailer. Two men are in view. They're K-MEN but they aren't wearing the usual dark clothing, they're wearing work clothes -- jeans, boots, short jackets zipped up against the rain. Posing as truck drivers. One of them is waving at us with a flashlight, the other is further back by the truck's cab.
No dialogue.
DON is climbing out of the RV. SARA and CHI-YUN have crowded forwards to see what's happening.
DON:
DON is walking towards the lead K-MAN, his hand on the zip of his jacket (which is zipped only part way up). The K-MAN's hand (not the one holding the flashlight) is also reaching for the zip of his jacket.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
DON:
K-MAN:
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
Big action panel! DON is diving sideways to the ground. The K-MAN has drawn a small machine pistol -- H&K MP5 -- and is spraying bullets in DON's general direction (but missing).
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
SFX (gun):
DON has rolled to his knees and drawn his gun. Have we mentioned DON's gun before? DON has a REALLY BIG GUN. He fires it at the K-MAN, a single shot.
SFX (gun):
The K-MAN staggers back, clutching his gun arm, his gun dropped. Looks like DON scored a hit. But behind him, we see the second "truck driver" (we'll call him "K-MAN #2") approaching. And he's already morphed into full WOLF-MAN form.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
K-MAN #2:
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
We don't see how fast K-MAN #2 moved, obviously, but he's right up next to DON already and swinging claws at him. DON dodges the attack.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
A wide view of the area, and we can now see FOUR K-MEN (all in wolf form) standing on top of the jack-knifed trailer. All are armed.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
Inside the RV, JAMES is behind the wheel. SARA stands behind him, leaning on the back of the seat and looking over his shoulder.
JAMES:
Outside view again. The RV races forwards towards where DON is still fighting K-MAN #2. DON has blocked another swing, using his left arm (not the one holding his gun). The claws don't hit but the impact has driven DON to his knees.
SFX (strike):
JAMES skids the vehicle round, missing DON by inches and slamming into K-MAN #2. The manoeuvre was made in such a way that the RV is between DON and the four K-MEN on the trailer. (We don't need to see the trailer in this view, but the angles and directions need to be consistent.) Note that we've temporarily lost track of K-MAN #1 (don't worry, he's coming back). DON is lying on the ground (from an attack we didn't show).
SFX (tyres):
SFX (impact):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
Still behind the wheel, JAMES looks sideways to the trailer. From his POV we see the four K-MEN standing atop it open fire. We see bullets strike the side window but ricochet off harmlessly (it's armoured, as has been mentioned previously).
SFX (bullet ricochets):
JAMES:
Looking from DON's side of the RV, DON is no longer fighting and he's struggling (unsuccessfully) to get to his knees. He's holding his left arm awkwardly but, remarkably, he's kept hold of his gun in his right hand. K-MAN #2 hasn't got up from the collision but we don't need to show him in the panel. We can see that CHI-YUN has flung open the side door of the RV and is looking at DON. He's only a few yards away but will he make it...?
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN has left the vehicle and is standing next to DON. The panel needs to illustrate the difference in their sizes: he's an all-American hunk and she's a teenage Chinese girl. He's a foot taller and twice her weight. No way is she going to lift him.
CHI-YUN (thought):
Ok, she doesn't really turn into a horse. But we need to show that she's much bigger. Taller and wider. At the same time, her clothing changes into a sleeveless tank top that shows off her new muscles (there's no reason for her to have changed clothing but it will help make the change to her body obvious so why not?). As a concession to the horse idea, her hair is now a long black "mane" (and it may as well stay like this for a while, even after she loses her muscles). She's bending down to pick up DON. He has blood on his face and isn't doing much to help.
DON:
CHI-YUN:
Close-up as a hand reaches for a sub-machine-gun lying on the road. The hand belongs to K-MAN #1 -- the one that DON initially shot. Yes, he's back in the fight and barely hurt.
No dialogue.
K-MAN #1 rises to his feet, holding the gun. He begins to morph into WOLFMAN form.
No dialogue.
CHI-YUN has DON settled on her shoulders. She's facing K-MAN #1, who has the gun levelled at her from only a few feet away. It's wearing a big, toothy grin. She looks panicked.
K-MAN #1:
CHI-YUN (thought):
CHI-YUN:
DON:
Same scene. CHI-YUN stands frozen. But SARA is now standing between her and the K-MAN.
SARA:
Close-up on the K-MAN as he pulls the trigger.
K-MAN #1:
SFX (gun):
K-MAN #1:
4. CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
Wider view of SARA kicking the K-MAN in the stomach. It has absolutely no effect. Behind her, CHI-YUN and DON are being helped into the RV by FRED.
SARA:
SARA:
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
Back with JAMES, looking from his POV to the trailer with the four K-MEN. They are leaping (effortlessly) to the ground and running towards us.
JAMES:
Now from FRED's POV in the RV's doorway, we see SARA dodging the K-MAN's swing. K-MAN #2 is running towards her (yes, he's already recovered from being hit by the RV).
FRED:
SARA turns her back on the K-MAN. He swings at her back -- it looks like he may have hit, although she doesn't react to it. (He hasn't; he's just torn her shirt.)
SFX (shirt):
SARA begins to sprint towards the RV. She has ducked low just as K-MAN #2 leaps at her. In consequence, he's sailed over her head and collided with K-MAN #1 -- who was himself just about to deliver a killing blow.
SFX:
K-MAN #1:
K-MAN #2:
SARA leaps and clasps FRED's outstretched hand.
JAMES (off-panel):
FRED:
A wide shot of the RV accelerating away. K-MEN #1 and #2 are picking themselves up off the floor. The other four K-MEN are close but not close enough. They open fire but the armoured RV is impervious.
SFX (tyres):
CHI-YUN, SARA, FRED, DON, and JEROME, in the cramped quarters of the back of the RV. CHI-YUN is bending over DON, who still has blood running down his face. SARA has her back to FRED (and us) and is looking over her shoulder, trying to see what he's seeing. The back of her shirt is in tatters. JEROME is sitting and looking backwards through one of the windows. Everybody should be holding on to something, as the vehicle is obviously moving very quickly.
FRED:
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
DON:
JEROME:
Same scene. Everybody looks up at the ceiling.
SFX:
JEROME (softly):
Same scene. A clawed hand comes through the skylight, sending glass showering down. The claws belong to K-MAN #2 (yes, him again).
CHI-YUN:
Close-up on FRED. K-MAN #2 reflected in his eyes... you know the deal.
FRED (thought):
A view of the roof of the RV from the outside. K-MAN #2 is kneeling on it, leaning over the broken skylight. But both of his hands are clutching his head, which is thrown upwards, mouth (muzzle... whatever) open in a howl.
K-MAN #2:
The K-MAN is now in human form. He's on his feet, still clutching his head, face distorted in pain. A tall, thin CHI-YUN is looking through the skylight.
K-MAN #2:
CHI-YUN:
The K-MAN loses his balance and pitches off the roof. He's still in human form (and will stay that way).
K-MAN #2:
Inside the RV, we can see CHI-YUN is much taller than usual (tall enough to get her head out of the roof). FRED is sitting on a bench, blood trickling from his nose.
SARA:
FRED (softly):
From the POV of JEROME looking through a side window, we see K-MAN #2 hit the ground.
JEROME (shouting):
An exterior view of the RV skidding to a halt.
SFX (tyres):
In the front of the vehicle JAMES leans forwards and peers through the rain-slicked window.
JAMES:
Another exterior view. JEROME has left the vehicle through a side door and is sprinting back towards the unconscious K-MAN #2. SARA stands in the door, looking after him.
SARA:
JEROME hoists the K-MAN over his shoulders.
No dialogue.
Back in the RV, SARA and CHI-YUN help JEROME and the K-MAN through the door.
CHI-YUN:
SARA (shouting):
JEROME collapses on to a bench. The front and sleeve of his shirt are now stained RED with blood.
JEROME:
JEROME (softly):
SARA sits next to JAMES, who is intent on the road.
JAMES:
SARA:
JAMES:
JAMES turns to look at SARA, eyes bugging.
JAMES:
In the back of the vehicle, DON is wiping blood from his face. FRED is still slumped on the bench but his eyes are open.
FRED:
DON:
FRED doesn't look at DON.
FRED:
DON just looks at FRED.
FRED:
DON moves forwards to stand behind JAMES (we see this from behind, so FRED's still in the foreground of the panel).
FRED (softly):
Now a view of SARA, JAMES, and DON from the front.
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
DON:
In the back of the RV. It's now stationery (though the reader probably can't tell that, except by inference from the fact that nobody is in the driver's seat). The K-MAN is unconscious on the floor, surrounded by DON, JAMES, SARA, FRED, and CHI-YUN. (Yes, it will be very cramped.) JEROME doesn't need to be in sight (he's unconscious somewhere).
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
DON is going through the K-MAN's pockets.
DON:
FRED runs his hand over the K-MAN's face. (No need to show the whole group in this panel -- just FRED and DON will do.)
FRED:
DON:
FRED:
DON pinches the K-MAN's cheek.
DON:
DON sits back on his heels.
DON:
SARA tosses a small, unremarkable, leather wallet to DON.
SARA:
DON looks at the wallet in his hands.
DON:
Close-up on the open wallet in DON's hands. It's one of these things with different compartments to hold cards and so forth. We can currently see a standard American driving licence. The picture matches the K-MAN on the floor and the name is ROBERT WEAVER. (We don't need to make out any other details on it.)
No dialogue.
Another close-up. From another compartment, DON pulls out a number of banknotes. Not a huge amount.
No dialogue.
Still in close-up. DON turns the wallet upside down. Something falls out and into his open palm. We don't see exactly what it is -- some sort of long metal chain.
DON:
Close-up on DON's face looking down into his palm. Registering shock and disbelief.
DON:
A close-up on DON's palm, looking down into it from his POV. We can now clearly see the item. It is a metal chain, but far more interesting are the metal tags attached to it -- military dog tags.
DON (off-panel):
Big panel, almost a full-page splash. Outside in the rain, DON is walking away from the RV. They are parked in a small clearing amongst trees -- possibly a picnic area or something. His fist is clenched (and we may be able to see the chain of the dog tags depending from it). SARA is standing in the open doorway, looking after him.
SARA:
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
DON turns to where FRED, SARA, CHI-YUN, and JAMES have walked out to him. They look doubtful and curious (FRED, who has turned his collar up, just looks annoyed).
CAPTION (DON's REPORT):
DON turns and walks back to the RV, past the others.
DON:
They all hurry after DON.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
FRED:
DON:
At the door to the RV, he turns and confronts them.
SARA:
DON:
DON turns and steps into the RV.
DON:
SARA grabs his arm.
SARA:
Close-up on SARA and DON, faces close together, rain streaming down...
SARA:
SARA (softly):
DON (softly):
DON is back in the RV. He's crouching next to where JEROME slumps in a chair. Blood is still evident on the front of JEROME's shirt.
DON:
JEROME:
JEROME stands with the aid of furniture. He grimaces with pain. DON is also standing now.
JEROME:
DON:
A "look" passes between them.
No dialogue.
DON and JEROME shake hands.
JEROME:
DON:
It's light (the sun is just starting to come up) and the rain has stopped. We need a big panel to show the gang assembled outside the RV with a variety of bags. Not a huge amount of luggage, but still it's obvious they have packed up their possessions and are parting company with the RV. Note that SARA should be wearing a new shirt (the last one was torn, remember?) JEROME is a little behind the others, leaning against a tree. It's not clear whether he's conscious. They all face DON, who stands by the driver's door. It looks like he's the one who will be driving off. FRED's motorcycle is possibly visible parked nearby.
DON:
SARA hugs DON. He seems a bit awkward about it.
SARA:
DON:
DON climbs into the driver's seat.
DON:
Puts on his sunglasses.
DON (softly):
The RV pulls away, heading down the road (into the rising sun, just to be dramatic).
No dialogue.
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