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This issue takes place a few days after the previous issue. But it's obviously been a rough few days (on the run) so people won't have changed clothes and they look pretty much the worse for wear (especially Don).
Most narration in this issue is in the form of FRED's WEB LOG ("BLOG"). This should be indicated by a common but distinctive computer font. These captions will be marked in the script as "FRED's BLOG".
A close up of a hand (DON's hand) knocking on a door.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
The door is open and we see HUEY for the first time. He's about Don's age (mid-50s). He has long, black hair tied back in a pony tail and a small goatee. He is dressed immaculately in sharply-creased pants (which we don't need to see here, if this is just an upper-body view) and a buttoned-up shirt. He's obviously surprised to see Don.
HUEY:
Now a view of DON -- and he looks like hell. He's got a dressing on one temple and his arm is in a sling and he's in need of a shave. (In fact, he looks pretty much as he did at the end of last issue.) This should be a tight view of just him -- so if we do see the others standing behind him, it's not in any detail.
DON:
DON:
Back to HUEY.
HUEY:
Now a view of them both in profile, face to face. (Note that this POV is probably not actually possible in the real world, because they are either side of a doorway and we would have to be standing in the wall... but it should work ok in the panel.)
HUEY:
DON:
HUEY:
DON:
DON:
Big splash panel showing the full group in HUEY's sitting room. (The sitting room, by the way, is very modern, chrome-and-glass furniture, dominated by TV and hi-fi equipment. The same style should be repeated throughout the house.) The "full group" is: DON, JAMES, SARA, FRED, CHI-YUN, and HARRY. Note that JAMES wears his costume and mask and (of course) carries the SHIELD on his arm. The group should be arranged so that each of DON's captions can be placed next to the correct person in the panel.
CAPTION:
CAPTION:
DON:
DON:
DON:
DON:
DON:
A small close-up on HUEY. This can be a small panel overlaid on the main, full-page panel. HUEY's eyes are popping out of his head.
DON (off panel):
DON (off panel):
HUEY:
CHI-YUN has a big grin on her face, as if she's just thought up the best joke in the world.
CHI-YUN:
DON and HUEY share a look, their faces sad.
No dialogue.
Back to CHI-YUN, who still thinks it's funny.
CHI-YUN:
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
A wider shot, to include DON, HUEY, and SARA, as well as CHI-YUN.
SARA (softly):
CHI-YUN:
HUEY:
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
DON and HUEY are moving into another room.
DON:
HUEY (softly):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
HUEY's study. It's modern, tidy, efficient. Dominated by the desk, but one wall contains a long bench covered in bits of electronic hardware (circuit boards, computer screens, wires everywhere). In one corner is a small drinks cabinet. The back wall is a picture window looking out onto HUEY's large, tree-lined garden.
There is also a plush couch, which DON is hobbling towards. HUEY is standing by the closed door.
HUEY:
HUEY:
DON eases himself down onto the couch.
DON:
DON:
HUEY walks over to his desk, his back to DON.
DON:
HUEY is sitting on the edge of his desk, facing DON.
HUEY:
DON:
HUEY:
Another study, again modern and scrupulously tidy. A man sits in darkness, face illuminated by the glow of his computer screen. It's the K-MAN's SPY, last seen in ISSUE 14. As always, he's dressed in an anonymous black suit.
CAPTION:
SPY:
GENERAL (from screen):
A reverse angle, showing the GENERAL's face in a window on the screen. The GENERAL, of course, wears his full Marine Corps uniform.
GENERAL:
SPY:
GENERAL:
The SPY is lighting a cigarette while speaking.
SPY:
SPY:
Close-up on the GENERAL, looking stricken.
GENERAL:
GENERAL:
The GENERAL is shaking his fist.
GENERAL:
A gymnasium. Two young men are sparring in a boxing ring. They are wearing gloves and protective headgear and circle each other warily. They are alone in the gym. Both are heavily muscled and have short, military-style haircuts. One wears red and one wears blue , so readers can tell them apart. So We will call them K-MAN RED and K-MAN BLUE for now. K-MAN RED is the same man I called K-MAN #2 back in ISSUE 17.
CAPTION:
K-MAN BLUE:
K-MAN RED:
BLUE jabs at RED, who blocks with his gloves.
K-MAN BLUE:
K-MAN RED:
RED jabs and catches BLUE on the chin.
K-MAN BLUE:
K-MAN RED:
BLUE smacks RED with a right hook that knocks him to the canvas.
K-MAN BLUE:
BLUE looks down at where RED lies.
K-MAN BLUE:
RED is back on his feet and swinging an uppercut at BLUE. But he's changed. He's morphed into wolf form (the change splitting his headgear and gloves open, the tattered remains falling to the floor). And in wolf form his punch is POWERFUL. BLUE, still in human form, is lifted clean off the floor.
SFX:
K-MAN RED:
RED, still in wolf form, walks away from the ring. BLUE lies dazed and bloody on the canvas, looking after him.
K-MAN BLUE:
In the kitchen, CHI-YUN is examining the contents of the refrigerator (which we don't need to see). JAMES is pouring a glass of milk, while HARRY looks on.
JAMES:
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN:
HARRY:
FRED and SARA are in the back garden. It seems to be pretty big and is screened by trees and bushes. From what we can see of the house, it is also pretty big. They are just walking and talking.
FRED:
SARA:
FRED stops and looks at SARA
FRED:
SARA:
FRED looks back at the house.
FRED:
FRED:
SARA stares at FRED.
SARA:
SARA:
Close-up on FRED.
FRED:
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
Extreme close-up on FRED's eyes. And in the eyes we see DON and HUEY, together in HUEY's study, talking.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
SARA (off-panel):
A wider shot as FRED looks at SARA, who is looking back with a frown.
FRED:
SARA:
SARA:
Close up on FRED again.
FRED:
FRED is now walking away from her.
FRED:
DON and HUEY together in HUEY's study, the scene similar to that depicted in FRED's vision on the previous page. DON is sitting on a couch. HUEY is pouring them both drinks. (They both drink scotch over ice. Not really an important detail, but...)
DON:
HUEY:
DON:
HUEY carries the drinks over to DON, and smiles.
HUEY:
DON:
As HUEY hands DON his drink, they speak simultaneously (we'll have a single speech bubble coming from both men).
DON & HUEY:
SARA sits alone in the sitting room, cradling a mug of coffee. She frowns. Laughter comes through the door to HUEY's study.
DON (through door):
HUEY (through door):
FRED sits alone on the back porch. He's smoking (and the cigarette looks hand rolled, if you get my drift). It's now dark and he gazes moodily into the darkness.
No dialogue.
FRED is suddenly bathed in light from behind, from the back door being opened.
HUEY (off-panel):
Close up on FRED taking a puff on the joint.
FRED:
HUEY sits on the porch, regarding FRED.
FRED:
HUEY:
FRED watches HUEY smoking the joint.
HUEY:
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
FRED is opening the back door, heading back into the house. HUEY still sits on the porch, smoking.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
HUEY:
FRED:
FRED lies, partially dressed, on top of a bed in small guest room. The light is on and he's staring at the ceiling.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
Close-up on his hand reaching to turn out the light. A clock on the nightstand reads 1:35.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
A close-up of FRED's sleeping face.
No dialogue.
Extreme close-up on FRED's eyes, now open, and in each one is a face: an attractive young woman with long, straight, blonde hair: in fact, observant readers should be able to recognise FAITH. (Last seen in ISSUE 14 PAGE 6.)
FRED:
FRED sits on the edge of the bed, head cradled in his hand. The clock now reads 3:31 (it's luminous, obviously), to indicate that he's been sleeping for some time.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
FRED stands at the window, looking out into the night.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
Imagine you're lying flat on a bench and holding a heavy barbell above your chest -- that's our POV in this panel. Just two bare, muscular arms, hands gripping a steel bar.
CAPTION:
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
JAMES (off-panel):
Same view, the bar held high above our POV (maybe the arms quivering slightly) -- and SARA's head looking down at us. Her face is upside down in this panel, as she's standing at the "head" of our bench. (Did that make sense?)
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
SARA:
Now a long "regular" view of the scene. It's a gym -- possibly a YMCA or similar. JAMES, in workout clothes, is lying on a bench and pressing a pretty impressive amount of weight. (There should be three plates on each end of the bar.) SARA, in street clothes, is at the head of the bench and looking down into his face.
JAMES:
SARA:
The weight is now safely racked and JAMES sits on the bench looking at SARA.
SARA:
JAMES:
Close up on their faces.
JAMES:
SARA:
JAMES:
HUEY sits at his desk, studying his computer screen. He's deep in thought, so he evidently hasn't seen the others enter the room. Yes, they are all here -- we only need to show JAMES, though. JAMES is in costume.
JAMES:
A big panel showing the whole group from HUEY's POV: JAMES, FRED, SARA, HARRY, CHI-YUN. FRED's BLOG captions should be arranged so each is by the person he's talking about but they still read clearly in the order given here.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
Back to HUEY, looking at them seriously.
CAPTION (FRED'S BLOG):
HUEY:
Close-up on JAMES
JAMES:
SARA steps forward. HARRY is just behind her.
SARA:
HARRY:
CHI-YUN has sat down on the couch.
CHI-YUN:
HUEY leans back in the chair, smiling.
HUEY:
A lot of exposition from HUEY in this panel. So we'll try to make it interesting by including a montage of images in a big panel. The order of images isn't particularly important but will include: (1) HUEY sitting at his desk, giving this explanation; (2) the exterior of a small high-tech corporate headquarters, with a sign out front reading "FORWARD TECHNOLOGIES"; (3) a communications satellite circling the earth; (4) the interior of a high-tech electronics workshop with various bits of cool-but-unidentifiable equipment.
HUEY:
CAPTION (continuing HUEY's speech):
CAPTION (continuing HUEY's speech):
CAPTION (continuing HUEY's speech):
CAPTION (continuing HUEY's speech):
CAPTION (continuing HUEY's speech):
Close-up on JAMES's face.
JAMES:
HUEY (off-panel):
HUEY has his head in his hands -- not exactly "despairing", more frustrated.
HUEY:
HUEY:
Close-up on FRED.
FRED:
HUEY (off-panel):
Close-up on JAMES.
JAMES:
HUEY gestures at his computer screen (which currently faces him, of course).
HUEY:
Close-up on the screen, which HUEY has turned to face the group. It shows a street map of a waterfront area in Chicago.
HUEY (off-panel):
HARRY bends down to study the screen more closely.
HARRY:
HARRY turns to see everybody looking at him.
HARRY:
JAMES:
HARRY moves towards the door.
HARRY:
FRED:
HARRY:
It's night but streets are lit sufficiently for us to see the action. A distant view of a car pulling up alongside a large, dark warehouse.
CAPTION (vice-over, continuing HARRY's speech):
In the car, we see HARRY is driving and SARA is next to him. SARA is holding some small device and staring at its screen. FRED, JAMES, and CHI-YUN are squeezed into the back seat. They are all in dark clothing (JAMES in costume, obviously).
SARA:
HARRY:
SFX (gadget):
SARA:
JAMES leans forwards.
JAMES:
In the front seat, HARRY is furtively checking that his revolver has a full cylinder.
HARRY:
JAMES, HARRY, SARA, FRED, and CHI-YUN are leaving the car.
SARA:
HARRY:
Close-up on HARRY leaning down by a padlocked door, picking at the lock with a small tool.
HARRY:
Wider view, showing JAMES and SARA standing next to HARRY.
JAMES:
SARA:
Still wider view, including CHI-YUN and FRED in the panel.
SFX (lock):
HARRY:
A distant, high POV, showing the group furtively slipping in through the warehouse door.
No dialogue.
Pulling back the POV still further, we see a figure watching them from a nearby rooftop. We only see him from behind (as we're looking past him to the warehouse door). He's a dark form, wearing a long, black cape that pools around him as he crouches on the edge of the roof. On his head is some form of helmet, or cowl, with two small, pointy "ears" on top. This is KNIGHT OWL, as our readers will discover shortly.
No dialogue.
A small close-up of black-gloved hands attaching a small grapping hook to the edge of the roof.
No dialogue.
The figure swings down off the roof, using a thin line attached to the grapple. Note that we should still only see him from the back, so he's just a caped, cowled shape.
No dialogue.
Inside the warehouse, the group sneaks along a wall towards a lit area. HARRY leads the way, SARA is behind him carrying the little tracking device. Then CHI-YUN, FRED, and JAMES bringing up the rear.
SARA:
A close-up on JAMES.
JAMES (softly):
Same view of JAMES, as a black-gloved hand grabs him by the shoulder.
No dialogue.
JAMES has grabbed the hand and has thrown his assailant flat on his back on the ground. The assailant isn't Knight Owl! That surprised you, didn't it? It is a man dressed all in black with a black full face mask, but no silly cloak or pointy owl-ears. The dress should be reminiscent of a ninja costume. We will call him NINJA #1, for convenience.
NINJA #1:
SFX:
JAMES punches NINJA #1 to make sure he won't cause any trouble.
SFX:
JAMES:
FRED looks at JAMES and the unconscious guy.
FRED:
VOICE (off-panel, shouting):
Now we see HARRY, CHI-YUN, and SARA facing the person who yelled. They are at the edge of an open area, surrounded by shelves and crates and other such things. To one side is a kind of low cabin that obviously serves as the office. The ceiling is very high, with skylights. (This isn't actually important yet but will be later so I need to mention it now in case it features in any of the upcoming panels.) In the open area are a total of eight men, all dressed like NINJA #1. Some of them are carrying crates. It could be the night shift going about its business -- but the ninja costumes kind of suggest otherwise. All the ninjas are looking back towards our heroes. One of them (evidently the guy who just shouted) is pointing at them.
SARA (softly):
Similar view, nobody has moved, but CHI-YUN has changed (or is changing, whichever looks best). Her new form is a human woman, several inches taller than her usual form, with long black hair, a very "top-heavy" physique, and a completely impractical, low-cut, red, white and blue swimsuit.
No dialogue.
And before anybody else can react, CHI-YUN is charging across the floor towards a pair of ninjas --
CHI-YUN
-- and straight past them as they side-step. Completely out of control, she is crashing into a huge stack of crates behind them. The impact is massive. Crates fly everywhere. The ninjas just look dumbfounded. (How you show them looking dumbfounded in full-face masks is beyond me. Body language?)
CHI-YUN
SFX:
A high view of the scene -- our heroes are being menaced by the ninja types and it looks like all-out action is about to begin. We are actually looking through a roof window. In the foreground of the panel, the mysterious caped figure is looking down through the window. Well, this is the last page so it looks like the readers don't get to learn his name this issue -- it can be a mystery for the next.
KNIGHT OWL:
Next issue: Chicago Knight
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