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This story opens a couple of days after the events of the previous issue. Everybody has had chance to change clothes but all of them remain "in character" in their dress.
The PAUL/JEROME/HARRY character begins the scenario as HARRY and his captions will be labelled as such. When he changes personality, his captions will be labelled to reflect this. Note that JEROME's captions use British spelling; everybody else uses American spelling. (Hopefully.)
Most narration in this issue is in the form of SYLVIA ROTH's dictated journal, marked as such in the text. These should be lettered on the page in some common but distinctive computer font. When we see her on-panel, her journal dictation will be shown as regular speech.
The RV is now parked outside a sizeable house. It's a solid-looking wooden construction with three storeys (including attic rooms in the roof). No lights are showing. DON, JAMES, SARA, CHI-YUN, HARRY, and FRED are walking towards the front porch of the house. FRED's new motorcycle may be visible parked near the RV but it's not essential if the panel is too cluttered (its presence can be inferred as the issue unfolds). The house is surrounded by dense woods (on three sides -- the fourth side looks on to the ocean but we can't see that at the moment) and reached by a narrow private road. The woods should be of a type suitable for the Pacific North West.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
DON and SARA by the front door. DON is looking at SARA, who has her hands raised in an "I don't know" gesture.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
SARA lifts a decorative urn on the porch, revealing a door key.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
DON has opened the front door.
SFX:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
SARA has pushed past DON and is racing across an unlit hall.
SFX:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
Close-up of SARA's hand as it pushes buttons on the keypad of a sophisticated alarm panel.
SFX:
SFX (buttons):
SFX:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
Big splash page of the whole team in the mansion's living room. And it's a VERY large and luxurious room. Wood panelling, a huge picture window overlooking the ocean, doors into several other rooms, thick-pile rugs on the floor, a big open fireplace (not lit), big leather couches placed around a low central table, a state-of-the-art home entertainment system with a big wall screen, and so on. CHI-YUN has her nose and hands pressed against the window. FRED kneels by the entertainment console, examining a shelf of CD cases. (For future reference: they're not generally using CDs in 2014. These are old disks). HARRY is prowling around, inspecting things. DON has collapsed on to a couch. SARA is perched on the arm next to him. JAMES stands near the door, surveying the scene.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
SARA:
HARRY:
DON:
FRED (softly):
Close up on DON and SARA. DON's eyes are closed.
DON:
SARA:
DON:
SARA is leading the others out of the room. She's frowning at CHI-YUN's question.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
The kitchen, which is huge and full of expensive appliances. The group is milling around chaotically, preparing a haphazard mix of food. We don't have to show everybody in the next few panels, just enough to make the exposition work.
FRED:
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
More of the kitchen activity.
HARRY:
CHI-YUN (thought):
CHI-YUN has shape-changed into a K-MAN, complete with long overcoat. She's looming over HARRY in a menacing fashion.
CHI-YUN:
HARRY:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
Now looking at a computer screen. We can see a mess of overlapping windows (possibly including SYLVIA's journal entry typing itself out). But the main window shows a KRAI. It's identical to the form CHI-YUN just adopted, but instead of the long overcoat this one wears futuristic-looking silvery coveralls. It's also carrying a large, high-tech blaster weapon.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
A reverse angle shows that it's SYLVIA's office (last seen in ISSUE 1 PAGE 16. Sylvia, dressed casually, is sitting at her desk while dictating her journal. On the desk in front of her is the flat-panel computer screen we were just looking at (it appears to have folded up out of the otherwise featureless desk). SYLVIA is holding a copy of the blaster we saw the KRAI holding on the computer screen.
SYLVIA:
SYLVIA tosses the blaster carelessly on to the desk.
SYLVIA:
Sylvia rests her chin on her hands and has a pensive look. Still recording her journal entry.
SYLVIA:
SYLVIA:
Back to the computer screen, but the picture of the KRAI has been replaced by a man dressed in the same costume as JAMES always wears -- and carrying an identical pentagram-emblazoned shield. We probably can't tell that it's not JAMES (that's the whole point of masks!), but hopefully it will become obvious with subsequent dialogue. Standing next to him is a young woman with long auburn hair and green eyes. It's the face we saw in ISSUE 6 PAGE 17, in FRANKLIN's "flashback" panel. She's attractive, athletic, and dressed in a white mini-dress with a green cape fastened round her shoulders. Although she doesn't wear a superhero-type mask, it's obviously not casual dress any more than JAMES' green-and-black costume is.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
This page should be arranged so that panel 2 is the biggest panel. The others are close-up views and can be smaller, perhaps arranged around the main panel (if that allows the dialogue to flow logically).
Close-up on JAMES' cowled face.
JAMES:
Wider angle showing the whole gang -- DON, SARA, FRED, HARRY, CHI-YUN -- looking at JAMES. They're sitting in the living room, with the remains of dinner still around.
JAMES:
HARRY's reaction. Disbelieving.
HARRY:
DON's reaction. Amused.
DON:
FRED's reaction. Rolling his eyes.
FRED (softly):
CHI-YUN's reaction. Confused.
CHI-YUN:
SARA's reaction. And her face is completely impassive.
No dialogue.
Close-up on JAMES again. He's reaching up to his cowel and pulling it back to show his face. It's the face we saw in ISSUE 2 PAGE 1, but this is the first time the other characters have seen it.
JAMES:
Another view of the whole group. The attention is still on JAMES. SARA is walking from the room but nobody pays attention to her.
JAMES:
CHI-YUN:
DON:
We see DON's eyes are on SARA's back as he speaks. She's walking out through the door. Nobody else is watching her.
CHI-YUN:
DON:
Close-up on FRED.
FRED:
FRED:
Wider shot showing everybody staring at FRED.
FRED:
Identical panel: everybody still staring at FRED.
CHI-YUN:
Outside, SARA is sitting alone on some rocks by the beach, staring over the ocean. The lights of the house are behind her.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
DON is standing behind SARA. She speaks without looking at him.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
SARA:
DON sits next to SARA.
DON:
They sit side-by-side, looking at each other.
SARA:
SARA looks over the ocean again while she's speaking. DON studies her face.
SARA:
DON:
SARA:
SARA is walking back towards the house. DON remains sitting and watching her walk away.
DON:
DON now sits alone, watching the ocean.
DON (softly):
A dark, open, low-ceilinged place. It's an underground car park, though there are no cars there at the moment. A few overhead lights provide pools of illumination, but the lone woman pushing her baby buggy is mostly in darkness. The woman is EILEEN WEBSTER. She's wearing a heavy overcoat.
CAPTION:
EILEEN:
Close up of baby GEMMA WEBSTER. Um... it's a baby. They all look the same. This one's a girl, so the covers will have to be be pink. (Oh, I'll get in trouble for that!)
EILEEN (off-panel):
GEMMA:
EILEEN looks back over her shoulder, frightened. We see her face clearly for the first time. She's about 30, short brown hair, very ordinary.
EILEEN:
EILEEN and the buggy are bathed in a blinding white light. We see EILEEN shielding her eyes, panic on her face.
EILEEN:
Now looking from EILEEN's POV, looking into the blinding light. We can see three figures but only in silhouette as the light source is behind them. And they don't seem to be quite human. They have the right number of limbs, but the proportions are all wrong. They seem large and brutish, with improbably-wide shoulders. Their jaws protrude out from blocky heads and there could be a suggestion of tusks in the profile. It should look feasible that they are men in costumes but because of the lack of detail the reader (and presumably EILEEN) can't be certain whether they are human or not. One of the figures is bending down towards the baby buggy.
No dialogue.
Back in the mansion's main room, only JAMES, CHI-YUN, and HARRY remain. CHI-YUN and JAMES are talking, HARRY sits apart and appears asleep (his hat pushed over his eyes). JAMES is typing on a computer keyboard (it will be a wireless keyboard which they can pass around). JAMES will have his cowl pulled down, revealing his face, throughout this scene.
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
SFX (keyboard):
JAMES stands and tosses the keyboard to CHI-YUN.
JAMES:
CHI-YUN now has the keyboard and is looking at the wall screen that's part of the entertainment system. It shows an image of MAJOR DEMOCRACY in full costume and carrying the SHIELD (i.e. looking identical to JAMES). The text next to the image should be greeked but CHI-YUN is going to read out the interesting bits anyway.
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN (softly):
JAMES has reached the door of the room when HARRY speaks to him. We'll see HARRY from JAMES's POV. He's looking at JAMES. (Obviously he's pushed his hat up.)
HARRY:
JAMES:
CHI-YUN (softly, off-panel):
JAMES stands by the door, looking at HARRY.
HARRY:
CHI-YUN (softly, off-panel):
JAMES just looks at HARRY.
CHI-YUN (softly, off-panel):
JAMES turns and walks out of the room.
No dialogue.
Close up on HARRY, who has slumped back into his chair and pushed his hat over his eyes again.
HARRY:
CHI-YUN (softly, off-panel):
CHI-YUN (off-panel):
JAMES, at the foot of the stairs, is frowning.
CHI-YUN (off-panel):
CHI-YUN (off-panel):
And now, as JAMES mounts the stairs, he allows himself a small smile.
CHI-YUN (off-panel):
CHI-YUN (off-panel):
CHI-YUN (shouting, off-panel):
Outside, DON is still sitting alone where we last saw him. The house is visible behind him.
CHI-YUN (shouting, inside house):
DON (softly):
Back in SYLVIA's office. She's standing, looking out of her window. We can't see exactly what's outside, other than bright neon street lighting illuminating her face. We can't see the office behind her in this view.
SYLVIA:
CHARLES (off-panel):
SYLVIA has turned and we see, with her, a wider view of the room. The door is open and CHARLES is standing there. CHARLES is... for want of a better term, let's call him her butler. Therefore, he's dressed formally and appropriately for his position. CHARLES is middle-aged, showing some grey in his immaculate, slicked-back hair. He's carrying a silver tray on which sits a mug of some steaming beverage. His face is bland and business-like.
SYLVIA:
SYLVIA:
CHARLES is placing the mug on the desk.
CHARLES:
CHARLES is near the door again, pausing before leaving.
CHARLES:
SYLVIA:
CHARLES:
Close-up on SYLVIA, once more looking through the window.
SYLVIA:
SYLVIA:
DON is still sitting alone in the dark by the ocean. His face is brooding.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
JAMES is sitting alone in a bedroom (large and luxuriously furnished, in keeping with the rest of the mansion), holding the SHIELD in two hands, looking at it speculatively.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
SARA's bedroom. She's wearing night clothes (an oversized t-shirt) and the lights are off, but she's sitting on top of the bed rather than lying in it. She's illuminated by the moonlight from the window. Her knees are pulled up with her arms wrapped round them.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
JAMES, costumed and masked again, stands on the mansion's terrace, looking over the ocean. It's daylight, but very early (long shadows, remembering the Sun is rising behind the house).
JAMES:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
JAMES begins a simple stretching exercise.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
SARA (off-panel):
JAMES stands and watches as SARA runs past him and into the house. She's coming from the direction of the sea. She's wearing her swimming costume (last seen in ISSUE 3 PAGE 2). Her hair is wet and she's dripping water.
SARA:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
JAMES looks at the empty doorway where SARA entered.
JAMES (softly):
DON is coming out of the house, through the door which SARA just entered. He's holding coffee.
DON:
JAMES:
DON:
JAMES is now doing one-handed push-ups (his left arm -- the one with the shield strapped to it -- is held out parallel to the ground). DON watches, bemused.
DON:
JAMES:
DON heads back into the house.
DON (softly):
A big panel with a long shot of DON, SARA, and CHI-YUN walking along a crowded city street.
CAPTION:
DON:
SARA:
DON:
CHI-YUN:
Another man on the same street. He's wearing a business suit and expensive overcoat. And he has a phone pressed to his ear. We'll call him MIKEY.
MIKEY:
MIKEY:
Use a reverse angle to show him watching the backs of our three heroes moving down the street.
DON:
MIKEY:
Same view, but a big truck is driving across an intersection and blocking MIKEY's view of the other three.
MIKEY:
The truck has moved on and MIKEY is once again looking down the crowded street -- but his three targets are nowhere in sight.
MIKEY (softly):
Back at the house, FRED is coming down the stairs. He's carrying his jacket over his shoulder and his crash helmet in one hand.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
FRED (shouting):
JAMES (off-panel):
JAMES is in the doorway to the lounge, gripping the top of the door frame, and using it to perform pull-ups. FRED pauses to regard him.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
JAMES:
FRED continues down the hall to the front door, putting his jacket on as he walks.
FRED (softly):
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
JAMES (off-panel):
In the lounge, HARRY is standing and looking out of the window. We should be able to see JAMES behind him, still exercising.
HARRY:
JAMES:
We now see through the window from HARRY's POV. There is a small boat out in the bay, far enough away to be an indistinguishable blob.
JAMES (off-panel):
An identical view, but now we can see a bright flash from the boat, such as you might see from sun reflecting off glass. It's late morning, but the sun will still be somewhere behind the house so the reflection does make sense.
HARRY:
JAMES (off-panel):
In an apparently empty sky, we see a seagull gliding serenely along
CHI-YUN (off-panel, softly):
CHI-YUN is in a restaurant at the top of Seattle's Space Needle, looking out through the glass. DON and SARA are sitting at a nearby table, with food in front of them. Other diners are in the background.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
CHI-YUN:
DON is using a pocket knife to cut into a heavily taped-up package (about the dimensions of a shoebox). We might be able to see shipping labels on it (air freight), but nothing specific.
DON:
CHI-YUN sits down at the table. DON is taking a cell phone out of the package.
CHI-YUN:
DON:
DON hands CHI-YUN the phone.
DON:
CHI-YUN:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
DON is peering in to the box, looking at the other contents (which we can't see).
DON:
SARA:
SARA gestures at the seagull, which is perched on a rail outside the window and eyeing them quizzically.
SARA:
HARRY is picking his way along the shoreline, negotiating a narrow, rocky beach between the water (on his left) and a steeply wooded bank (on his right). He's holding his hat on with one hand and his overcoat is flapping around him in the breeze. He doesn't look terribly happy.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
HARRY:
HARRY:
HARRY:
He stands and shades his eyes and we see, from his POV, the curious boat (a far-off tiny blob). It should appear that HARRY is to the North of the house and is standing on a headland of the bay.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
HARRY:
HARRY:
A close-up of HARRY's face as he stands with his eyes closed.
HARRY:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
Identical view. His eyes remain closed but his nostrils flare as if taking a deep breath. From this point on, HARRY will assume his JEROME personality and his captions will be labelled appropriately in the script. There isn't a physical change (I'm beginning to regret that decision) so I'll try to make the personality change obvious in the dialogue. Note that JEROME's speech will use British spelling where necessary.
SFX:
Identical view, but his eyes are now open.
JEROME:
JEROME begins to remove HARRY's overcoat.
JEROME:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
JEROME draws HARRY's revolver from a pocket of the coat.
JEROME:
JEROME hurls the revolver as far as he can into the water.
JEROME:
JEROME, stripped to the waist (and without shoes, though that won't be obvious at the moment), is wading into the water.
No dialogue.
In the boat (a small powerboat) sits the "fisherman". He's not fishing and there is no sign of fishing equipment. He has binoculars slung around his neck. At the moment, he's eating a sandwich. His name is unimportant, but we'll call him BOB for purposes of the script. Behind BOB, we can see a pair of hands gripping the stern of the boat as JEROME pulls himself out of the water.
No dialogue.
JEROME is now in the boat, balancing easily although it is rocking violently. BOB has turned and is drawing a pistol.
BOB:
Close-up detail of JEROME bringing the edge of his hand down on BOB's wrist, causing him to drop the pistol (probably overboard).
BOB:
JEROME now has BOB helpless, twisting his arm behind his back in some kind of fancy hold.
JEROME:
A close-up of a computer screen (the big one in the house) displaying a news story. The banner across the top of the screen should read "L.A. GLOBE" and "ONLINE EDITION", and should match the banner of the newspaper seen in ISSUE 3 PAGE 6. Beneath this we have the headline, in big bold type: "Aliens Took My Baby". A photograph of EILEEN WEBSTER should also be visible. The text of the story scrolls off the bottom of the screen, with only the following visible:
Vancouver, Canada.
Secretary Eileen Webster's baby was
snatched from her buggy by what Ms.
Webster has described as "huge,
inhuman figures". Police have
Pull back from the above view to reveal JAMES, sitting in front of the wall-screen and scribbling notes in a small book. He is fully costumed and masked.
SARA (off-panel):
DON, SARA, and CHI-YUN have entered the room. SARA is loaded with garish shopping bags of uncertain contents (but the reader can assume sundry items of fashionable clothing). CHI-YUN should be dressed noticably differently from when we last saw her. DON holds the mysterious package up in his hands.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
DON:
SARA (softly):
JAMES stands and stretches.
JAMES:
DON:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
SARA is critically examining a new pair of boots.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
BOB (off-panel):
JEROME enters, pushing BOB ahead of him. He still has BOB in some form of fancy arm lock and BOB is obviously in some discomfort. JEROME is still stripped to the waist and barefoot, dripping water.
JEROME:
JEROME pushes BOB, not gently, against a wall.
DON:
JEROME:
Close-up shot of DON's face up close to BOB's. We don't need to see their full bodies, so we can't see exactly how DON is holding BOB against the wall, but we should see from their faces that it's not gentle: DON is grim and BOB is scared.
DON:
In the same view, we should see BOB's eyes have slid to the right, looking over DON's left shoulder.
No dialogue.
DON glances over his shoulder, in the direction BOB's looking. Our POV should now let us see who he's looking at: SARA.
DON (softly):
DON's face right up against BOB's again.
DON:
DON (softly):
Same view. We're still looking at their heads, so we don't need to see what DON does to elicit BOB's squeal of pain.
BOB:
BOB:
BOB:
From behind, JAMES puts a hand on DON's shoulder.
JAMES:
DON is pushing BOB out of the room, again not gently, while the others watch him. They are exchanging uncomfortable looks, but nobody is making a move to stop him.
DON:
JAMES:
CHI-YUN, JAMES, SARA, and JEROME remain in the room, still eyeing each other uncomfortably.
CHI-YUN:
JEROME:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
Now everybody is looking at SARA.
JAMES:
SARA:
SARA turns away from the others and looks through the window. We should see this as if looking in through the window, SARA's troubled face in the foreground and the others standing behind her.
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
SARA turns and confronts them.
SARA:
SARA:
SARA (softly):
DON returns. He looks grim.
DON:
CHI-YUN:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
DON gives CHI-YUN a funny look.
DON:
DON:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
JAMES faces DON.
JAMES:
DON:
DON:
DON has moved over and placed his hand on SARA's shoulder. She doesn't turn to face him.
DON:
JAMES, CHI-YUN, and JEROME exchange uneasy glances.
FRED (off-panel):
FRED is standing in the doorway. He's evidently just come in; his jacket is zipped up and he's holding his crash helmet.
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
FRED:
FRED:
FRED steps into the room (he needs to be away from the doorway) and tosses his helmet on a chair.
FRED:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
Large group shot. Everybody's getting FRED's points, looking uncomfortable, and quite obviously looking everywhere except at him or at each other.
FRED:
FRED:
FRED:
FRED:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
Close-up of SARA. Her face is emotionless but her fists are clenched.
SARA:
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
SARA rushes from the room. We should probably see her retreating back from the group's POV, so we don't see her expression.
SARA:
SARA (softly):
CAPTION (SYLVIA's JOURNAL):
Next: Onward and Downward
See also: Los Angeles Globe Headlines
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