This story is set the morning after the preceding issue. Nobody has changed clothes since the previous issue. Note that PAUL/JEROME is exhibiting a third personality in this issue: HARRY. I will refer to him by this name throughout this issue. As usual, there is no physical difference between HARRY and the other personalities.
Most narration in this issue is in the form of HARRY's internal first-person monologue, which should be indicated on-panel by a distinctive "type writer" lettering. (A basic monospaced courier with maybe an idiosyncrasy, such as a blurred "o"). These captions will be marked in the script as "HARRY's monologue".
Close up on HARRY's face. He's slumped against the door inside the cabin (from last issue), so we may see wood behind him. A shaft of early-morning sunlight from the window (out of panel) lights his face. His eyes are closed. He has a day's growth of stubble which gives him a decidedly disreputable, down-at-heel look compared with the neatly-groomed Paul and Jerome that we are used to seeing.
CAPTION:
CAPTION:
The same view but HARRY's eyes are open.
CAPTION:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY climbs awkwardly to his feet. We still can't see much more of the cabin.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Big panel, wide view of the cabin interior. HARRY is on his feet, looking down at the WILD BOY. This is our first real look at WILD BOY. Apart from the short curly brown fur over his entire body (he's naked), and his extreme musculature, he looks like a human child. Maybe four feet tall, but his height is hard to gauge at the moment as he's sitting on the floor with his knees pulled up to his chin. His eyes are open and he's watching HARRY.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY and the WILD BOY face off. HARRY crouches and feels in his coat pockets.
WILD BOY:
HARRY:
HARRY is offering a partially-unwrapped candy bar to the WILD BOY.
HARRY:
HARRY watches the WILD BOY devour the candy.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY:
HARRY:
HARRY is standing and looking around the cabin. The WILD BOY, still chewing candy, doesn't take his eyes off him.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY:
WILD BOY:
HARRY crouches again, face to face with the WILD BOY.
HARRY:
HARRY:
HARRY looks over his shoulder, towards the cabin door.
HARRY:
The clearing outside the cabin. JAMES, SARA, and CHI-YUN are packing up camping gear. It is evident that they have spent the night outside. We'll have a big panel to establish the scene and the characters.
SARA:
JAMES:
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN:
Close up on SARA, looking serious.
SARA:
Close up on CHI-YUN, smiling.
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN:
Back in the cabin. HARRY is listening to the conversation.
CHI-YUN (voice coming through door):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY turns to look at the WILD BOY again. The boy looks back blankly.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY goes back to listening at the door.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Close up on HARRY, eyes wide.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Still on HARRY, but a wider shot to include the door again.
DOYLE (voice coming through door):
Outside in the clearing again. SARA, JAMES, and CHI-YUN are looking off to the side, where MIKE DOYLE (from last issue) is leaning against a tree. He no longer wears his backpack, but we might see his shotgun over his shoulder.
DOYLE:
JAMES steps between DOYLE and the cabin.
JAMES:
DOYLE steps forward while readying his shotgun.
DOYLE:
DOYLE grips the shotgun in two hands and fires at JAMES from a distance of only a few feet. The shot catches JAMES full in the chest and he is slammed back by the impact.
SFX (shotgun):
DOYLE:
SARA (yelling):
DOYLE looks down at JAMES, and works the shotgun action. We should see SARA running, but towards the prone figure of JAMES, not towards DOYLE.
SFX (shotgun):
DOYLE is levelling the shotgun at JAMES (still prone, but need not be in the panel). Leaping in from his side is CHI-YUN -- literally leaping, she's hurling herself at DOYLE, arms outstretched. We should see that her fingers are hooked into sharp, cat-like claws.
No dialogue.
DOYLE half turns and smashes the shotgun into CHI-YUN's head, with her claws inches from his throat.
SFX:
CHI-YUN has landed on all fours and is looking up at DOYLE. And there is a definite cat-like quality to her stance. It could be the way her arms ("forelegs") bend the wrong way, or it could just be the shape of her face when she bares her big pointy teeth. But she's still a human girl, so the overall effect should look unnatural.
DOYLE:
CHI-YUN:
Big action panel! From a POV over CHI-YUN's shoulder as she gathers herself to spring at DOYLE. He's pointing the shotgun at her. But behind him, we see the cabin door slams open and HARRY comes charging towards him.
SFX (door):
Another big action panel! Alerted by the noise, DOYLE turns his head in time to take HARRY's wild right hook square on the jaw. The shotgun fires, peppering the ground near CHI-YUN as she springs sideways (cat-like) out of the way.
DOYLE:
DOYLE:
SFX (punch):
SFX (shotgun):
SARA is kneeling over JAMES, who lies with his eyes closed. There's a big black scorch mark on his chest, but his costume is intact.
SARA:
Same positions, but JAMES's eyes are open.
JAMES:
Same positions. SARA punches JAMES in the chest.
JAMES:
SARA:
SARA is standing and looking off to the side. JAMES doesn't move, but shields his eyes with his hand and looks up at her.
JAMES:
SARA:
HARRY grabs DOYLE by the lapels and slams him into a tree. DOYLE drops the shotgun near his feet.
No dialogue.
DOYLE gets HARRY with an uppercut to the chin; HARRY is barely affected.
No dialogue.
HARRY punches DOYLE in the stomach.
No dialogue.
As DOYLE doubles over from the punch, HARRY punches downwards, knocking him to the ground.
No dialogue.
On his knees, DOYLE reaches towards the shotgun. HARRY stamps on his hand.
No dialogue.
With his other foot, HARRY kicks DOYLE in the face, smashing him over backwards.
No dialogue.
Back to SARA, watching.
SARA:
Scene change. It's still early morning. DON and FRED in the RV, heading out of the city. DON is driving, FRED is in the passenger seat but his head is back and he's fast asleep.
CAPTION:
DON looks sideways at FRED and his finger reaches for a control on the dash.
CAPTION:
Music blares from the cab's speakers, and FRED wakes with a start.
MUSIC:
FRED:
DON touches another control. FRED is rubbing his eyes and yawning.
DON:
FRED:
DON:
FRED:
DON steers to the side of the road (this may be easier to show from an exterior POV).
DON:
FRED:
FRED (softly):
While FRED slides behind the wheel, DON moves into the back of the vehicle.
FRED:
DON:
DOYLE is sitting back, wiping blood from his nose. HARRY has him covered with the shotgun. JAMES, SARA, and CHI-YUN approach from behind HARRY (CHI-YUN now looks like her normal self).
CAPTION (voice-over continuing DON's speech):
DOYLE:
HARRY:
DOYLE reaches inside his jacket, going for something in an inner pocket.
DOYLE:
DOYLE:
DOYLE hands a sheet of paper to HARRY, who keeps the shotgun on him.
DOYLE:
HARRY hands the paper to JAMES, who is at his side.
HARRY:
DOYLE:
DOYLE is rising to his feet, keeping his hands in obvious sight (HARRY doesn't lower the shotgun).
DOYLE:
HARRY lowers the shotgun, but his face is still grim. JAMES is handing the warrant back to DOYLE.
HARRY:
SARA:
HARRY:
HARRY holds the shotgun casually over his shoulder as he turns to SARA. In the background, we see DOYLE walking towards the open cabin door.
HARRY:
SARA:
DOYLE is at the cabin door, back to us, looking in. SARA is open-mouthed, hands spread, as she tries to find a response to HARRY. JAMES puts a hand on her shoulder.
JAMES:
DOYLE walks back towards the group. HARRY is opening the shotgun's magazine and letting the shells fall to the ground.
DOYLE:
HARRY:
DOYLE holds out his hand for the shotgun. He seems remarkably calm about all this.
DOYLE:
HARRY hands the shotgun, stock first, to DOYLE.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
DOYLE is walking off into the woods by the side of the cabin. The others just watch him go.
SARA:
HARRY:
CHI-YUN:
HARRY:
SARA confronts HARRY
SARA:
HARRY:
Close up on HARRY.
HARRY:
HARRY:
HARRY looking round at the other three.
HARRY:
And they are looking at the ground, off to the side, anywhere except at HARRY or each other.
No dialogue.
HARRY turns away from the group and towards the cabin.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
DON sitting at his computer workstation in the back of the RV, typing. This is just establishing for Panel 2.
SFX (DON typing):
SFX (computer):
A view of the computer screen. Depending on the angle (and available space), we might also see DON's hands on the keyboard. But the focus should be on the open window, which shows an interactive chat session. This should be lettered as a plain-old computer font (each person's lines can be in a different colour, e.g. blue for DON and pink for SPIRIT, but only if this makes it easier to read). The style of the interface should NOT be like today's proprietary chat clients, but it should be obvious (even to someone not computer literate) that we are seeing a typed dialogue between two different people. Whew. Ok, the dialogue should be lettered exactly as follows (including any typos, abbreviations, etc). (Note that we obviously come in mid-conversation, so some has scrolled off the top of the screen and we start with half a sentence from DON.)
also passports - and drivers licenses
SPIRIT: no prob except for James if u can't photograph him
DON: I know
SPIRIT: James is a security risk - we need to find out who he is
DON: I know
SPIRIT: can u get me a blood sample?
DON: That's Fennec talking
SPIRIT: :P
DON: I won't invade his privacy. He's given me no reason not to
trust him
SPIRIT: he can't be James Lang's son
DON: Do you *know* that?
SPIRIT: i told u i'm not omniscient :P
SPIRIT: but if he is - want to take a guess who his mother is?
DON: I'm trying not to think about it
SPIRIT: i don't trust Smithsteen either
DON: You don't trust *anybody* - but let me worry about it. You
recruited me for a reason - remember?
SPIRIT: because u r the best
DON: OK. Let me do my job. Can you get the documents to me
in Seattle?
SPIRIT: it might be better to send them to San Francisco for u
Close-up of DON while he thinks about this.
DON:
A close-up on the lower part of the screen -- we'll repeat some of the previous chat, but it's mainly to see the new lines added, so we can chop most of the screen off at the panel border.
in Seattle?
SPIRIT: it might be better to send them to San Francisco for u
DON: I'm not going to San Francisco
SPIRIT: u will when you answer the fone call from Franklin
Marks
DON: What phone call from Fr_
SFX (phone, off-panel):
A view of DON, holding his phone and staring at it like it's about to explode.
SFX (phone):
DON (softly):
Close up on DR PAUL SMITHSTEEN's wallet, showing his driving license (of course the picture is the same as the man we currently know as HARRY).
HARRY (off-panel):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Wider view of HARRY, holding the wallet.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY sits on one of the logs by the fire, pouring himself coffee. He watches JAMES fiddling with the fire.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
JAMES:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
SARA is coming out of the cabin with an arm full of cans.
SARA:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CHI-YUN joins SARA.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Group shot as they gather round the fire.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
The sun is higher. JAMES, HARRY, SARA, and CHI-YUN sit around. Breakfast is over.
JAMES:
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
HARRY pours himself more coffee.
HARRY:
Still sitting around. CHI-YUN addresses her question to JAMES.
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
HARRY:
While JAMES delivers his next speech, SARA makes "vomiting" motions behind him.
JAMES:
JAMES turns to speak directly to SARA. She adopts an innocent expression.
JAMES:
JAMES:
JAMES still speaking.
JAMES:
DON (off-panel):
Sure enough, DON is walking towards them. FRED is trailing somewhat behind. They are dressed as they were on the drive -- no back packs or other hiking gear.
SARA (shouting):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Big splashy type panel of the whole group reuniting. SARA is hugging DON. JAMES and CHI-YUN walk over, grinning. HARRY remains seated, drinking his coffee. FRED hangs back, ignored.
DON:
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
FRED (softly):
SARA has let go of DON and smiles over at FRED.
SARA:
DON:
DON looks down at his feet, where he's just stepped on a shotgun shell. There's a small cluster of them -- HARRY emptied the magazine, remember?
DON:
Once more sitting around, talking.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
DON:
Close-up on DON.
DON:
DON:
SARA holds the folded warrant out to DON.
SARA:
DON merely smiles as he starts reading the warrant.
HARRY:
SARA:
DON (softly):
DON still reading. Everybody else watches him.
DON:
DON:
DON looks up. He's grinning.
FRED:
DON:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
DON is on his feet and taking out his phone. Everybody looks at him.
DON:
The others begin to stand (SARA, JAMES, and CHI-YUN first).
SARA:
SARA:
Close on HARRY and FRED, who are still sitting.
HARRY:
FRED:
HARRY:
Group shot again. HARRY is now standing.
DON:
JAMES:
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
FRED (softly):
CHI-YUN has moved over to DON and is SNIFFING the warrant which he still holds in his hand.
DON:
SFX (CHI-YUN):
CHI-YUN:
The rocky shore of a small lake. DOYLE is making his way along the shore.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
JAMES steps out (from behind a rock, tree, whatever) and confronts DOYLE.
JAMES:
DOYLE:
Looking from JAMES' POV. Some way behind DOYLE, we can see HARRY running up.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
DOYLE:
Now SARA and CHI-YUN come into view, behind JAMES. And CHI-YUN is holding the WILD BOY's hand.
JAMES:
DOYLE takes the shotgun off his shoulder.
DOYLE:
Our POV is now through the telescopic sight of a rifle. DOYLE is centred in the crosshairs.
CAPTION (voice-over, continuing DOYLE's speech):
We now see the ranger MARC CARTER, lying flat on his stomach, looking through the sight on his hunting rifle. He's obviously aiming down at DOYLE.
DON (off-panel):
CARTER turns, and we now see DON standing over him. DON is non-threatening -- he's simply made a statement of fact.
CARTER:
CARTER:
DON squats next to CARTER, who no longer holds the rifle. He reaches into his pocket (for his phone).
DON:
CARTER:
DON is dialling on his phone.
DON:
Back on the lake shore. Still a stand-off. DOYLE has his shotgun in his hands, but casually; pointed down. SARA's phone rings.
DOYLE:
SFX (phone, in SARA's back pocket; "musical" lettering):
SARA is listening to her phone.
SARA:
SARA:
DOYLE is amused. He's taking a PDA out of a pocket.
DOYLE:
DOYLE is tapping on his PDA, looking at the display (which we don't need to see).
DOYLE:
DOYLE tucks the PDA back into his pocket. His face is expressionless.
DOYLE:
DOYLE simply walks away from the group, back along the shore of the lake. They all watch him go.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
HARRY:
DON and CARTER walk down the slope towards the group.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CARTER holds the WILD BOY's hand in one of his, while DON shakes his other hand. The rest of the group stand a little way off.
DON:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
DON starting off up a trail while the rest fall into line behind.
DON:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
The group arrives back at the RV.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CHI-YUN:
DON:
The cab of the RV. DON is driving. CHI-YUN is sitting next to him. She's looking down at her feet, not at DON.
CHI-YUN:
DON:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Exterior, distant view of the RV as it drives up the highway.
DON (from within vehicle):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Next issue: Unity
See also: Don's Mission Report
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