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The issue takes place later on the day of the previous issue. Most characters won't have changed clothes. Last issue's rain has stopped but the sky can be dark and foreboding when shown. Outdoor scenes will show people dressed appropriately for September in Northern latitudes.
PAUL begins the scenario in his JEROME SANDERS personality and his captions will be labeled as such. When he changes personality, the caption labels will change accordingly. Note that JEROME's captions use British spelling where appropriate (everybody else should use US spelling).
Most narration will be in the form of CHI-YUN's LETTER, which will be noted as such in the script. This should be lettered with a distinctive "handwriting" style with an occasional misspelled or crossed-out word.
An exterior view of an unremarkable SUV moving along a major highway in a stream of traffic.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
CAPTION:
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
CAPTION:
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
A view inside the SUV. We can see CHI-YUN in the back seat. Note that she's completely different to the way we normally see her: blonde, Caucasian features, and a much "fuller" figure. Hopefully the following dialogue will establish that it's still CHI-YUN. She has a writing pad on her knee and is chewing the end of a pen (she's writing the letter, obviously). Next to CHI-YUN, SARA balances a laptop computer on her knees.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
JAMES is driving. He's probably in costume, but we can't tell because he's wearing his all-concealing long overcoat and has his cowl off. JEROME is next to him, dressed similarly to last issue but has a fresh shirt on (no blood stains). We can probably see (or partially see) SARA and CHI-YUN in the back seat.
JAMES:
SARA:
The SUV has stopped outside the entrance of a HAILEY HOTEL and the four are standing on the sidewalk. FRED is sitting on his motorcycle behind them. All are looking up at what is obviously a very tall building (which may or may not fit in the panel's perspective). A HAILEY is a very high-class hotel. Uniformed doormen, a valet rushing to park their car, possibly a red carpet on the sidewalk, etc.
CAPTION (continuing previous speech):
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
FRED stands next to SARA, his motorcycle helmet in his hands. In the background, JAMES hands car keys to a valet.
FRED:
SARA:
FRED:
In the expansive lobby (remember, the watchword is "opulent"), CHI-YUN and SARA approach the desk.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
SARA (softly):
SARA and CHI-YUN walk back to the others. JEROME is currently leaning heavily on JAMES and not looking at all well. CHI-YUN looks glum.
CHI-YUN (softly):
SARA:
JEROME:
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
A luxurious hotel suite. FRED and JAMES are supporting JEROME as they enter the room. CHI-YUN and SARA are already in the room and examining various features.
CHI-YUN:
SARA:
Close-up on the three men.
JAMES:
FRED:
JAMES:
JEROME pulls away from the other two.
JEROME:
JAMES:
JEROME:
JEROME purposefully makes his way towards an open door (into a bedroom), supporting himself on furniture. SARA confronts him, hands on hips, angry.
SARA:
JEROME:
JEROME leaves the room as SARA turns to appeal to the rest of the group.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
CHI-YUN turns to JAMES and FRED.
CHI-YUN:
FRED:
JAMES:
DON's massive Recreational Vehicle on a moderately crowded highway.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
The RV stops (or slows) at the edge of the road. A steep bank slopes down from the road. The passenger door is open.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
The body of the captured K-MAN (in human form) tumbles out of the passenger door.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
The K-MAN rolls down the slope while the RV accelerates away.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
The RV does a U-turn across the lanes of traffic, crossing onto the other side of the highway (and therefore heading back the way it came).
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
At the bottom of the slope, the K-MAN is getting onto his hands and knees.
No dialogue.
The K-MAN trudges up the slope. He's bloody and dusty but appears more-or-less unhurt.
No dialogue.
The K-MAN trudges along the side of the highway, thumb held out.
No dialogue.
Some kind of roadside diner, truck stop, or similar. The K-MAN is in a phone booth, dialling a number.
No dialogue.
The K-MAN speaks on the phone.
K-MAN:
K-MAN:
The hotel room. Everybody lounges about. SARA is channel-surfing. FRED is using a laptop computer. CHI-YUN continues to write her letter. JAMES reads a newspaper (the LA Globe). JEROME is not present.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
Close-up on JAMES and the newspaper. We see the headline of the story he is reading: "SNATCHED BABY STILL MISSING". (The rest of the story can be greeked or left out-of-panel.)
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
JAMES:
FRED, SARA, and CHI-YUN all look at JAMES.
FRED:
CHI-YUN:
SARA ("sing-song"):
JAMES holds up the newspaper for them to see.
JAMES:
FRED:
JAMES leans over to hand the newspaper to FRED.
JAMES:
FRED (softly):
JAMES, SARA, and CHI-YUN are dressed to go outside. JAMES has his costume under his coat and the "art case" that carries his SHIELD. FRED is NOT dressed to go out -- he's barefoot and shirtless and has his feet up on the couch in front of the TV (we don't need to see the screen but, if the panel composition requires it, it's some daytime talk-show). A laptop computer sits on a table near him.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
JAMES:
FRED:
FRED watches as the door to the suite closes behind them.
No dialogue.
Still with his feet up, FRED pulls the laptop towards himself.
No dialogue.
Close-up on FRED and the computer as he types. The screen shows some kind of search interface. FRED is typing the following into the "search" box:
GEMMA WEBSTER ABDUCTI_
No dialogue.
JAMES, SARA, and CHI-YUN on an inner-city street, having just climbed out of their SUV. They are looking up at tall building. All we can see of the building is a blank concrete wall and possibly a boarded-up window.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
JAMES, SARA, and CHI-YUN are walking by a boarded-up opening in the side of the building. A sign on the boards reads "KEEP OUT - UNSAFE STRUCTURE".
JAMES:
A close-up on FRED's screen as he reads about the case. He's reading a story in the "L.A. GLOBE online edition" (see ISSUE 8 PAGE 18). There's a photograph of a tall skyscraper with the caption "Sentinel Newspaper Offices Today". The story next to the picture reads:
newspaper building has been abandoned and listed for demolition since the events of 1988. Despite safety warnings, many people still use the underground car park as a short cut between
(This is an extract from the middle of a longer piece, the top and bottom can be cut off by either panel border or the edges of FRED's screen so we don't have to type the whole thing.)
No dialogue.
SARA leans (casually) against one of the large wooden boards.
SARA:
Another view of FRED's screen, this time showing a different page. Unlike the slick, professional LA Globe site, this one feels more like a "personal" Web site: lurid colours and horrible fonts. The page title is "HAUNTED VANCOUVER" and the part of the article currently on screen reads:
historic Sentinel building, which was the focus of a multiple demon manifestation. Remember the riots of 1988? What they don't want you to know is that those "rioters" were goblin invaders from another universe. Vancouver was only saved from destruction by the actions of Major
No dialogue.
SARA suddenly tips backwards into the building as the board she was leaning on comes loose and pivots inwards.
SARA:
FRED has his phone in his hand and is regarding it speculatively. On the phone's display we can see the name "JAMES". His finger hovers over the "call" button.
No dialogue.
FRED tosses the phone aside.
FRED:
SARA is standing and dusting herself off. She's in a large (as far as we can tell), low-ceilinged, underground space. The only light comes through the missing board. JAMES and CHI YUN are climbing through.
JAMES:
SARA (softly):
CHI-YUN (thought):
We now see the space from CHI-YUN's POV. She's seeing perfectly in the dark -- though there should be an unnatural cast to the light. (See ISSUE 4 PAGE 19 for reference.) They're in an underground car park, currently unoccupied.
JAMES:
SARA:
Now back to a normal (not CHI-YUN's night vision) POV. JAMES and SARA face each other. JAMES now has a small flashlight in his hand, pointed down (not in her face).
JAMES:
SARA:
JAMES:
Still in normal POV, CHI-YUN crouches in the darkness (not so dark that we can't see her).
SARA (off-panel):
7. JAMES (off-panel):
CHI-YUN (thought):
SFX (from CHI-YUN):
CHI-YUN is now on all fours, crawling across the floor.
SARA (off-panel):
JAMES (off-panel):
CHI-YUN crawls around some more. Her face now looks elongated, more dog than human.
SARA (off-panel):
JAMES (off-panel):
Now back in CHI-YUN's "night vision" POV. She's low to the ground and looking at something (the edge of a small, thin rectangle of card) trapped in a long crack (or join) in the concrete floor.
SARA (off-panel):
JAMES (off-panel):
Wide view of the car park. JAMES and SARA have turned to face CHI-YUN. JAMES shines his flashlight at her. CHI-YUN is still looking part-dog. She's holding up a small object -- it's a book of matches.
CHI-YUN:
They are now close together and examining the match book.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
JAMES is now striding out of the car park. The girls hurry after him.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
Exterior shot of a typical apartment building. The SUV is parked on the street outside but there is no sign of JAMES, SARA, or CHI-YUN.
CAPTION (voice-over):
Inside a typical apartment building: JAMES and SARA are in a hallway outside an apartment door. JAMES is now in full costume, cowl up, gloves on, no overcoat, SHIELD on arm. SARA is dressed as previously. Sitting at JAMES's feet is a big, white DOG. (Guess who?) JAMES is knocking at the door.
VOICE (through door):
SARA crouches down next to the DOG, which has its face next to the door.
JAMES:
SARA (softly):
SFX (from DOG):
The DOG looks up at SARA.
DOG:
SARA (softly):
DOG:
VOICE (through door):
SARA stands and she and JAMES regard each other, perplexed. Behind them, we can see the door to the apartment opposite is opened a crack and an elderly woman's face is looking out. This is MRS. WATSON, the neighbour.
SARA (softly):
JAMES (softly):
MRS. WATSON:
JAMES and SARA turn to look at the woman, who is now beckoning to them.
No dialogue.
JAMES ,SARA, and CHI-YUN (the DOG) follow MRS. WATSON into her apartment. She's a neatly-dressed, grey-haired lady. The apartment is meticulously tidy. Nobody else is here.
MRS. WATSON:
JAMES:
MRS. WATSON looks intently up into JAMES's masked face (he's a good bit taller than she is).
MRS. WATSON:
MRS WATSON heads out of a door (into the kitchen). SARA and JAMES look at each other. She's grinning while he remains serious.
MRS. WATSON:
SARA and JAMES sit side-by-side on the tiny couch.
SARA (softly):
JAMES (softly):
JAMES:
MRS. WATSON (off-panel):
MRS. WATSON enters carrying a tray of tea things.
SARA:
MRS. WATSON:
The DOG, sitting by the side of the couch, looks up at MRS. WATSON.
DOG:
JAMES:
MRS. WATSON:
MRS. WATSON fiddles with the tea things while she talks.
SARA:
MRS. WATSON:
JAMES:
Close-up on JAMES's palm. In it lies the match book found by CHI-YUN. We can now plainly see the logo on the cover: "TROLL CLUB", in some kind of blocky display font.
JAMES (off-panel):
MRS. WATSON hands JAMES a cup of tea.
MRS. WATSON:
The three sit talking and drinking tea. CHI-YUN (still as a dog) lies on the floor.
CAPTION (CHI-YUN's letter):
JAMES, SARA and the DOG are in the process of leaving.
JAMES:
MRS. WATSON:
By the apartment door. MRS. WATSON is giving SARA a peculiar look.
SARA:
MRS. WATSON:
JAMES:
JAMES, and SARA are walking down the hallway, trailed by the DOG.
JAMES:
SARA:
SARA:
CHI-YUN is now back in human form and has caught up with the other two. They are going through the door to the building's stairwell.
CHI-YUN:
JAMES:
They round a corner in the stairwell and are confronted by a man who appears to be standing waiting for them. He's of middle age, slim, clean-shaven, wearing a suit and raincoat. He's SERGEANT DEITEN.
DEITEN:
Confrontation on the stairs. They eye each other warily.
JAMES:
DEITEN:
SERGEANT DEITEN flashes a badge at JAMES.
DEITEN:
JAMES:
DEITEN:
The focus is on JAMES and DEITEN as they face off against each other.
JAMES:
DEITEN:
Wider view of the whole group.
DEITEN:
CHI-YUN:
SARA claps her hand over CHI-YUN's mouth.
SARA:
CHI-YUN pulls SARA's hand away.
CHI-YUN:
CHI-YUN (softly):
JAMES and DEITEN continue to face each other.
JAMES:
DEITEN:
DEITEN has moved past them and is walking up the stairs. They watch his back as he speaks.
DEITEN:
DEITEN:
JAMES, SARA, and CHI-YUN look at each other. DEITEN is now out of sight.
SARA:
JAMES:
SARA:
JAMES:
They continue down the stairs.
SARA:
JAMES:
They stand on the sidewalk, next to their SUV. JAMES is by the driver's door.
SARA:
CHI-YUN:
They stand and look at each other, pensive.
No dialogue.
Same positions. CHI-YUN and SARA looking at JAMES.
SARA:
In the vehicle, SARA and JAMES in the front.
SARA:
JAMES:
SARA (softly):
The "operations" room of the K-MEN leaders, as seen in previous issues. The SPY stands, studying the big electronic wall-map. The map shows the north-west United States.
CAPTION:
SPY:
GENERAL (off-panel):
A wider view of the room shows the GENERAL sitting at the head of the conference table. Nobody else is present. We've always shown the GENERAL in shadow or silhouette before: now it's time to show him properly. He's human (not KRAI, I mean), fifty-something, balding, slightly overweight. But the important factor (which we've kept hidden until now but I expect all the readers to have figured it out already) is his uniform: he's a Major-General in the US Marine Corps.
GENERAL:
The GENERAL stands next to the SPY and both examine the map.
GENERAL:
SPY:
SPY:
Close on the GENERAL's thoughtful expression.
GENERAL:
SPY (off-panel):
GENERAL:
GENERAL:
Looking back at the map, a pop-up window shows two pictures: one shows the K-MAN seen on pages 4 and 5 (ROBERT WEAVER) in Marine Corps uniform. The other shows a K-MAN in WOLFMAN form (presumably it's WEAVER; they all look the same). There is text next to the pictures but except for the name at the top, "WEAVER, ROBERT", it can be greeked.
GENERAL (possibly off-panel):
Close-up on WEAVER's record. We can see the following:
Date of Birth: 07/14/93
Place of Birth: Base Hospital, Camp Pendleton, CA
Father: Weaver, Samuel, Master Sergeant [Retired]
Father's Present Residence: Colchester, Il.
That's all we need to show. The rest of the (presumably extensive) record can be cut off by the panel border. The GENERAL is pointing directly at the word "Colchester".
GENERAL:
Back in the hotel suite, JAMES, SARA, CHI-YUN and FRED lounge around, talking.
JAMES:
FRED:
FRED:
JAMES looks defensive.
JAMES:
CHI-YUN:
Suddenly, JAMES is looking excited.
CHI-YUN:
FRED:
SARA:
JAMES:
JAMES stands and reaches for his shield.
JAMES:
FRED stands and grabs JAMES.
FRED:
Close up on FRED's grin.
FRED:
The hotel suite, later. FRED is dressed for going out: leather jacket on, hair gelled into a spiky arrangement. The others stand around, listening to him. The others have coats on (JAMES wearing his over the costume, naturally).
FRED:
JAMES:
FRED grins at JAMES. He seems to enjoy being the centre of attention for once.
FRED:
SARA (softly):
The head towards the door.
CHI-YUN:
Everybody turns to look at CHI-YUN.
CHI-YUN:
VOICE (off-panel):
Full-page splash showing the man emerging from JEROME's room and the surprised expressions of everybody as they turn to look at him. It looks like JEROME, but he's changed to his JESSE personality (we're not going to give his name on-panel; we'll have to save it till next issue). He's wearing fresh clothes (which just happen to be all black) and shows no sign of his previous injuries (though the shirt would cover them anyway). His hand clutches a bible to his breast -- one of those bibles you get on hotel night stands.
JESSE:
Next: Vigilantes
See also: Don's Mission Report; Los Angeles Globe Headlines
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