The issue takes place a few days after the previous one. Clothing and outdoor scenes should reflect late October in Philadelphia.
Most narration in this issue is in the form of HARRY's first-person internal monologue, which should be indicated on-panel by a distinctive "type writer" lettering in keeping with his "genre". These captions will be marked in the script as "HARRY's monologue".
A panoramic view of the centre of Philadelphia -- gleaming, modern, high-rise buildings in the afternoon sunlight.
CAPTION:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Now down at street level, we're looking at the facade of the Philadelphia Hailey Hotel, and like all Haileys it's a very up-market establishment.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Inside the hotel (the reader will have to infer it's still the hotel -- unless there are clues like the hotel name on menus or something) we find HARRY sitting alone at the bar. It's a big room, very tastefully appointed, big leather couches, potted ferns, etc. HARRY is sitting on a bar stool, probably the only person to do so. He's wearing his raincoat with the collar turned up and has his fedora on the bar next to him. He has an empty whiskey glass in front of him and he's gazing at the giant flat-screen TV behind the bar (it doesn't matter what it's showing, a commercial or something).
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Close up on HARRY, his gaze still fixed on the TV in front of him.
VOICE (off-panel):
HARRY looks at the speaker, who is a young barman.
BARMAN:
HARRY looks back at the TV.
HARRY:
The barman has turned away to pour the drink. HARRY is reaching for his hat.
HARRY:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
He walks away from the bar, putting his hat on as he goes.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY is now on a city street. The road is packed with traffic and the sidewalk is teeming with people -- in a variety of weird and outlandish fashions (from Harry's 1950s; point of view).
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He passes the window of a TV store, the window display showing fifty different channels.
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He passes a group of youths in full "Troll" regalia -- studded leather outfits with big metal spikes, make-up, tusk implants, the works. One of them has a music player under one arm.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (music):
He's by a small door, sandwiched between a "Crunchy Munchy" burger bar and an "adult" video store. An unobtrusive sign reads, "Benny's" and an arrow points diagonally downwards through the door.
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He's walking down narrow stairs.
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He's now at the bottom of the stairs and looking out into the basement room -- and it's a bar. A real, old-fashioned, "Cheers"-style bar. There should be a complete contrast to the Hailey bar. There's no chrome, just nice old (worn) wood panelling, coloured glass, subdued lighting. There is probably a TV but it's small and discrete. The guy behind the bar looks friendly rather than professional, and the few patrons are just... relaxing. I think this can be a full-page splash panel, to get the atmosphere across (and subliminally communicate a slower pace).
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HARRY is settled on a bar stool. The barman is standing ready to serve him.
BARMAN:
HARRY:
BARMAN:
HARRY:
The barman is filling a beer glass.
BARMAN:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY takes a swallow of beer.
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He is taking a folder-up newspaper out of his coat pocket. The barman, taking a hint, is moving away.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
He's reading the paper.
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He takes another drink of beer.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
He bends his head back to the paper, now open at an interior page.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
And, indeed, we will look at it in this panel. The paper is open at a music commercial. It's a picture of a young (20-ish) woman, heavily made up. She has a very thin and too-pale face, exaggerated black eyes with streaks of black running down her face as if her mascara has (artistically) run, long black hair fanned out around her head -- well, you know the type, but exaggerate it by a decade. She's wearing black and has big, chunky, spiked, metal shoulder pads that look like part of some fantasy villain's idea of armour. In the background are some vaguely trollish figures beating drums. The copy, in a suitably doom-laden font, reads:
CRUSHING HEADS
The ALL NEW download from Vancouver's leading Troll sensations
GRANITE HEAD
Featuring SUZI G
Ok, stick with me here, this is all relevant. (Or will be, eventually.)
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
A scene shift to a big executive office. Behind the big executive desk sits a woman in a big executive business suit. She's in her 40s, short hair in a conservative style, little make-up or jewellery. This is KAREN JASEN, the mayor of Winnipeg, Canada, though I'm not sure how I'm going to convey that in dialogue without it being contrived. So she'll probably have to have a name plate on her desk or something. Anyway, she's leaning forward to speak into an intercom in this panel.
CAPTION:
JASEN:
VOICE (off-panel):
CAPTION:
Now looking from a reverse angle, we see the person who has just entered the office -- and it's "SUZI G", the woman in the ad HARRY was reading. Her hair and make-up is less extreme, but still on the same theme. Her clothing is still black (and note that she must have long sleeves -- for reasons which aren't important right now) but she doesn't have the spiky shoulders. Oh, and she's looking quietly furious.
JASEN (off-panel):
SUZI:
Now the two women confront each other over the desk. Both are standing.
JASEN:
SUZI:
SUZI:
Close-up on JASEN's furious face.
JASEN:
SUZI (off-panel):
JASEN:
Now a close-up on SUZI, who is out-furiousing JASEN (and looks more scary because of the make-up).
SUZI:
SUZI:
SUZI has taken a sheet of paper (slightly crumpled) out of her pocket and is brandishing it at JASEN.
SUZI:
She's put the paper on the desk in front of JASEN, who is looking at it. (We don't need to show its content to readers, as the important points will be said in dialogue.)
JASEN:
SUZI:
JASEN:
SUZI explodes. Not literally, figuratively. (Though with her age within the critical range for having a superhuman ability, you could be excused for assuming I meant literally).
SUZI:
SUZI:
Close-up on JASEN, barely controlling her temper.
SUZI (off-panel):
JASEN:
SUZI (off-panel):
Still on JASEN (even though she's not doing anything different).
SUZI (off-panel):
SFX (off-panel):
A hotel suite. Pretty high-class, as it's a Hailey. FRED and SARA lounge on a couch, watching TV.
CAPTION:
FROM TV:
FROM TV:
SARA:
FRED:
SARA looks at FRED. He's still looking at the TV (which can be out of panel).
SARA:
FROM TV:
FRED:
SARA:
FROM TV:
SARA and FRED look at each other.
FROM TV:
Wider view of the room, to show JAMES entering. (He's in civilian clothes.)
JAMES:
JAMES has picked up the remote zapper and is pointing it at the TV.
JAMES:
FROM TV:
FROM TV:
JAMES:
FRED:
This panel is a TV screen. There's a news reporter standing on a boardwalk, ocean behind her, microphone in hand, speaking.
FROM TV:
Still showing the TV screen, but the picture has changed to show a grainy image of the SEA MONSTER we saw in ISSUE 23 PAGE 19 (humanoid, bigger than a man, with scaly green skin, festooned with weed-like growths, with big webbed feet, big webbed hands, and big bulbous yellow eyes).
FROM TV:
Still using the panel as a TV screen, we're back to the reporter.
FROM TV:
FROM TV:
JAMES, SARA, and FRED watching the TV.
JAMES:
FRED:
Now we're back to HARRY's newspaper and looking at a page of advertisements, where a discrete box announces:
REGAL THEATRE TONITE
BOGART DOUBLE BILL
The Maltese Falcon / The Big Sleep
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
A view of HARRY at the bar, and he's beckoning the barman over while holding up the folded newspaper.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
BARMAN:
HARRY:
Now we see the page that HARRY is indicating. He's folded it in a way to draw attention to a photograph. It's of a pretty, young, blonde woman, and the caption reads "Sally Anderson: missing since Tuesday". There is more text but it doesn't have to be legible on the panel. The whole story takes up a very small amount of column space, as if it's not very important.
BARMAN (off-panel):
HARRY (off-panel):
The BARMAN looks nervously at HARRY.
BARMAN:
HARRY:
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The paper is on the bar between HARRY and the BARMAN. The BARMAN is talking without actually looking at HARRY.
BARMAN:
HARRY:
BARMAN:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Close-up on HARRY's face, his eyes narrowed in thought.
5. CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY:
The BARMAN gestures to a door in the corner of the room.
BARMAN:
HARRY is walking across the room towards the door. He's passing a table with several empty beer bottles, and we can see him "casually" picking up one of the bottles as he passes.
HARRY:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
The office of SAM DANFORD. It's fairly small and non-descript, but looks well-lived-in. There is a couch in front of a TV, some old sports pictures on the walls, etc. Of course there are no windows, because the bar is in a basement. DANFORD sits behind the cluttered desk, feet up, reading a newspaper and smoking a cigar. He's middle-aged, slightly overweight, wearing an open-necked shirt with the sleeves rolled up.
HARRY has just entered the office.
HARRY:
DANFORD has dropped the paper and is sitting upright in the chair.
DANFORD:
HARRY:
HARRY is now right up against the desk.
DANFORD:
HARRY:
Close-up of DANFORD's hand moving across the desk towards a cluttered in-tray.
DANFORD (off-panel):
Same close-up view as the base of a beer bottle smashes down on DANFORD's hand!
DANFORD (off-panel):
SFX:
A wider view shows DANFORD's face contorted with pain as HARRY pins his hand under the beer bottle.
HARRY:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY:
With his free hand, HARRY moves some papers off the in-tray to reveal a shiny automatic pistol -- something flash like a 9mm Beretta.
HARRY:
HARRY is examining the pistol with a professional eye. DANFORD is nursing his injured hand.
HARRY:
HARRY:
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY sits himself on a chair, facing DANFORD and not *quite* pointing the gun at him.
HARRY:
Close-up on DANFORD's sweating face while he's talking. And I'm going to cop out here and not give the entire story in dialogue. Instead, I'll have HARRY summarise the essential points. Actually, this isn't lazy writing; it's conveying HARRY's way of cutting through waffle and obfuscations and getting to the crux of the matter. So there.
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CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY is standing, pointing his finger at DANFORD in a "listen to me" kind of way. DANFORD has his hands up in a "don't hit me" sort of way. Again, we'll keep the dialogue silent.
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We see HARRY's retreating back as he heads for the door.
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Left alone, DANFORD picks up the desk phone.
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A shabby apartment door with cracked and peeling paint. HARRY's hand, in close-up, knocks on it.
SFX:
HARRY (off-panel):
Same close-up view of the door. Bullets tear through the door where HARRY's hand was just knocking, throwing out splinters. LOTS of bullets. (The bullets are coming from the far side of the door -- i.e. somebody's shooting through it at HARRY.)
SFX:
A wider view of the door, which stands in a corridor in a run-down apartment building. The door is now riddled with holes. HARRY is standing against the wall at the side of the door -- what, you thought he was stupid enough to stand in front of it and get shot? He has his own gun (oh, ok, DANFORD's gun) in his hand.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
The door is open. A thug (big, muscular, unshaven, dirty t-shirt) looks out but doesn't look round the corner and see HARRY. The thug has a machine pistol (probably a 9mm Ingram MAC-11, the weapon of choice for thugs with delusions of grandeur). Well call him THUG 1, to avoid confusion with THUG 2 (who is still in the room).
THUG 1:
With the thug standing there like a dummy, HARRY's fist crunches into his face.
SFX:
HARRY steps into the doorway, gun held out to cover THUG 2, who is further back in the room. THUG 2 has a pistol (probably similar to HARRY's) in his hand but it's not pointing at HARRY. THUG 1 is collapsing to the floor in front of HARRY. He has dropped his gun to hold his nose (which is gushing blood).
HARRY:
THUG 1:
THUG 2 has dropped his gun and has his hands up. HARRY covers him with his own gun, while kicking THUG 1's weapon away from him. This will be the main panel on the page, so we can now see the room better: it's a one-room apartment, a dump, minimal furniture (mostly just a TV, a bed, and a couple of chairs). Pizza boxes are on the chairs and SALLY ANDERSON is on the bed. She is handcuffed to the iron headboard, gagged, dirty, and looking very sorry for herself (though not obviously harmed).
No dialogue.
HARRY bends over the bed and pulls SALLY's gag free. He's still covering the thugs with his pistol (though we don't need them in this panel).
HARRY:
SALLY:
HARRY:
SALLY.:
HARRY turns to face the thugs. (Maybe he can be looking right out of panel and pointing his gun at the reader. That seems dramatic.)
HARRY:
Evidently they have scrammed, because he's now put his gun away and is devoting his full attention to Ms. ANDERSON.
HARRY:
SALLY:
HARRY:
HARRY takes a small leather pouch from a pocket.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
Close-up on HARRY working at the lock of the handcuffs with a small tool.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY is still in the apartment. He's sitting on the bed, examining the thug's Ingram. From this angle, we can see another door out of the room -- not the apartment's front door, another one. The door is ajar and SALLY's speech caption comes from it.
SALLY (from door):
SALLY (from door):
SALLY (from door):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY and SALLY (I've just realised how unfortunate that pairing of names is) are leaving the apartment through the bullet-riddled door. HARRY is putting his overcoat round her shoulders.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY and SALLY in the back of a cab. She's talking on a cell phone.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
The cab is parked outside a police building (as we can probably tell from some convenient sign, and from the way police officers are entering and leaving, if not here then in the next couple of panels). HARRY is paying the cab driver. SALLY is out and looking round.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
SALLY is running towards a young man, similar enough to be her brother. HARRY's coat falls from her shoulders.
No dialogue.
She's hugging the brother while HARRY picks up his coat.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
The brother is handing HARRY some bills. Yes, HARRY is accepting his payment. (Does this make him any less of a hero? Discuss.)
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SALLY kisses HARRY on the cheek.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
HARRY watches SALLY and her brother walk up the steps into the police headquarters.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
As night falls, HARRY is walking down the sidewalk, alone, deep in thought. This may as well be a single-panel page to get all the remaining exposition over with in one go.
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Back in the hotel suite, JAMES, SARA, FRED, and CHI-YUN are gathered round a table. JAMES has a big road map unfolded. It's evidently night because the curtains are closed (if we can see them in this panel) and the lights are on.
SARA:
JAMES:
SARA:
4. JAMES:
We don't get to hear what the "but" was, because HARRY has entered the room. He's carrying his coat and hat, as if he's just come in from outside (which he has, of course). They all look at him.
JAMES:
HARRY:
He's disappearing through another door, leaving them to talk to his back.
JAMES:
HARRY:
JAMES:
HARRY:
HARRY sits on the bed in his hotel bedroom. He's fully dressed and wide awake. There is probably a pot of coffee on the nightstand.
CAPTION (HARRY's monologue):
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